OK now let's go ahead and move forward and we can go ahead and add in our hour.
We are at our third and fourth paragraphs for these pie for the pie chart here and how as you know for
the third and fourth craft this is where we make specific comparisons of the numbers.
And so what we have to do is we have to look at the pie charts and we have to break it and break it
into two parts.
What do you the Part 1 which are going to be comparisons for a third paragraph and when either part
two which are going to be comparisons for our fourth paragraph as you can see here we've already written
the introduction and we've already written our general overview paragraph that Hopefully you've already
listened to those lectures and you understand how to do it.
OK you have a good understanding of of really how to do it but you can see we're using the same process
we're using the same four paragraph process for anything for a pie chart for a line graph for a process
for a diagram.
It doesn't matter.
We're going to use the exact same process to do it.
Does that matter.
We can get through it and we can do it.
OK.
So as we're as we're looking at this you know we can go ahead and break these.
Break this into two parts.
So I'm really I'm really a big proponent.
I'm really a big proponent of breaking things down into categories I like to break them into categories.
Some students will say well I'm going to just talk about 1971 in one paragraph and I'm going to talk
about 2001 in another paragraph.
You can do that but that's not really the best way to go about doing it.
If they give you just just think about it OK just think about it.
If they give you two different years with the same categories it's probably the most logical thing to
do.
Compare the differences for the categories for the different years.
That's the most logical way to go about doing it.
And we're going to compare the numbers.
OK we're not really talking about in the third or fourth paragraph.
We're not going to be talking about this as the high number this is the low number.
This is the high number this low number.
We're not going to do that.
OK.
We're going make comparisons of the categories so we're going to break it down into categories we have
seven categories here.
OK.
And so in the end in my paragraph three is you've seen me doing before in my paragraph 3 I'm just kind
of breaking it down to you what I'm going to compare.
I'm going to compare the books computers furniture and restaurants.
I'm going to compare their numbers between 1971 and 2001.
OK.
And then in paragraph 4
I'm going to compare.
We're going to make comparisons of the numbers for petrol cars and food.
OK.
We're going to do and where we're going do our compare numbers.
That's all everybody.
Compare the numbers compare the numbers right.
So for books we can see that books we can see the books in 1971 are at 6 percent.
And then in 2001 they failed to 1 percent.
Then we see computers rose from 2 percent to 12 percent.
OK so that's got to make up our first sentence.
So from 1971 to 2001
books sale by 5 percent.
What the computer spending
dropped from 6 6 percent
to 12 percent
I wouldn't say I was I would just say Dr. from 6 percent to 12 percent.
Right.
So I talked about books and I talked about computers and computers were from 2 percent 2 percent to
12 percent
from 2 percent to 12 percent.
The typical said Price.
That's what we get right.
That's it right now.
What would the furniture do.
Furniture had a minimal fall of one percent down restaurants doubled from seven to 14 percent.
Help almost everyone.
We're putting this in the wrong spot.
Hopefully if you were in my class physically physically in my class you would tell me hey teacher you're
writing this in the wrong spot.
OK.
Okay.
And then we compare our comparisons however restaurant spending double from 1971 to 2001.
The French are Nido really didn't move as we can see a slight fall from 9 percent to 8 percent.
So you can see in this paragraph 3 how we're comparing numbers right.
You could see it you can see how we're just making comparisons of numbers and that's what you have to
do.
You have to be able to make really really good comparisons comparisons of numbers if you can make really
good comparisons of numbers.
That's all we do.
Paragraph 3.
And then for paragraph four we're going do the same thing in terms of petrol cars and food.
So when you look at it we will look at the char petrol made a slight slightly fail from 10 to 8 percent.
And cars cars almost doubled from 22 to 43 percent
OK and food made the biggest fall from 44 percent to 14 percent.
Wow that's a big fall.
OK so those those are numbers
right.
So
whose sales fell by 30 percent from 1971 to 2002.
What
as the car
purchases more than double from 22 percent to 43 percent.
That's a sentence that would be one more sentence talking about the petrol
as a final point.
It all started to feel quite to herself during this
this year.
And there we have it we have our we have our essay done.
OK.
So you can see third and fourth paragraph.
What are we doing comparing numbers right third and fourth paragraph.
We're comparing numbers right.
That's what we're doing here.
And you could see a variety of sentences you see compound sentences you see complex sentences.
But this is what good writing of an essay looks like is not very big.
Look at it first sentence one first paragraph one sentence general overview paragraph two sentences
paragraph three three sentences paragraph four two sentences.
Right.
So we only have 1 3 6 8 sentences here.
That's it eight sentences and we have around 200 words.
So this is a complete essay.
All right.
This is a complete essay.
And this is we want to get a very very high mark because it fills up the stat sheet in terms of the
answering the question.
Having great coherence having great vocabulary having great grammar.
OK.
So this is how you want to be able to do your third of what paragraphs.
You break them into parts.
OK you break them into parts.
That's how we do it.
OK.
That's how we do it right there.
There's our third or fourth OK.