Everyone.
Now let's go ahead and write Cowra specific body paragraphs for this table example.
As you can see by now when we're doing the specific comparisons we're talking about our third and fourth
paragraphs.
Our introduction is our first per our first paragraph our general overview is our second paragraph.
And then when we get to our third and fourth paragraphs when we get to our third or fourth paragraph
that's where we make specific comparisons of the numbers.
So we're going to make specific comparisons of the numbers here.
And so when you look at this third and fourth paragraph about I'm about to do for you right now we're
going to compare numbers now.
I think it's a good it's a good idea.
I think it's a good idea to follow the example to follow your general overview.
Right to follow your general overview and we we're talking about following your general overview the
race there that's part of the overview we don't need that for here.
We're talking about doing our general overview and our general overview we talked about we can we talked
about generally about food and housing.
And then we talked generally about clothing and entertainment.
So when you're doing your specific paragraphs you don't want to break them into two categories here
we have four categories.
So we're just going to break them into two parts.
So we're going in here again in our third or fourth paragraphs.
This is where we compare the numbers.
This is where we do comparisons of the numbers.
So for Paragraph 3 we're going to compare numbers
for the food and housing why we're following the same format of our overview.
That way we're going to have really good cohesion and really good coherence.
We're following the same overview format.
And then for the paragraph 4 we're going to compare numbers for the clothing and entertainment.
Right.
So you can see where we're at.
Well what would what we're talking about here is where I was showing you I'm showing you with this one
how you can really go about having good good good coherence good cohesion in your writing where it looks
great.
Okay.
So now we're going to compare the numbers for the food and housing and we're going to make sentences
and here in the third or fourth paragraph is where we're going to really get into comparing our numbers.
Okay.
So here we go in terms of number of comparisons.
Okay.
So as we look at it again we're not we're not really talking about high and low here that's not what
our discussion we should be going through and saying the high here the low here the high here the low
here.
That's not what it's about.
It's about comparing our our numbers.
Okay.
It was about comparing our numbers.
So this is what it will look like.
All right
a
right there is our first sentence here we actually need to make a correction in our overview.
Okay.
Because actually Spain is not the top because Turkey
Turkey is at the top everybody.
Turkey is at the top.
Turkey is the top in food.
And Germany is at the bottom in food and drink.
OK.
And one of my good students actually pointed that out to me that I made a small mistake in doing that
Turkey is at 36 percent and Spain is at 31 percent higher.
So we have our comparison of the numbers here.
All right.
And we also can talk about in terms of with Germany and France.
You can say that
Germany
France Germany France and the U.K.
actually thought about Germany and the U.K.
U.K. we had a
Germany in the U.K. We have a 5 percent
difference
in spending
10
is on 22 percent.
So that's what we were looking at right now so far in terms of our food and housing now and the housing
that's for food we look at the housing.
Why.
Because we can we can look at it and we can say that we can look at the U.K. in Turkey for someone make
those comparisons.
The U.K. is at 37 percent in Turkey is 20 percent
pay
for housing the UK spends 17 percent more
17 percent more to Turkey
UK.
Mysterious worse than Turkey is at the bottom
here this week.
See.
Here you can see
Germany
and France at the bottom with only a 2 percent difference.
33 percent vs. 30 percent.
So there's an example of our paragraph 3 in terms of us comparing numbers.
We compare numbers here and then for paragraph four we would do the same thing in terms of comparing
numbers for the clothing and the entertainment.
All right and so the paragraph for I'm not going to write the paragraph for what I'm going to ask you
to do as students are to go ahead is to go ahead and write right paragraph number four.
OK I want to look at this table right here and I want you all I want you as a student to try to make
comparisons of the pickup number four.
I saw what I have.
I'm having Stuka I'm having students try to do examples of paragraph number four in terms of making
the comparisons and sending them to us and we're going to add it to a list of students that are making
comparisons of Number Four.
I'm going to make.
I'm going to make edits and make edits to their examples of paragraph them before so you can see how
the paragraphs number before can be improved.
OK I'll be making videos of it talking about some of those edits for the paragraph number four for this
example.
OK so as a student in the course I'm giving you an assignment going in a paragraph number four.
Make them make the final paragraph of making making specific comparisons of the numbers for the clothing
and the entertainment part of the table.
OK all right so I'll talk to you soon and thanks a lot for participating.