WEBVTT 00:01.050 --> 00:07.530 OK now let's go ahead and move forward and let's describe our last introduction that we're looking at 00:07.530 --> 00:10.750 which is the introduction for the bar graph. 00:10.770 --> 00:11.130 All right. 00:11.130 --> 00:17.830 So again we're looking at it than what we have to do is we have to look at the bar graph and baseline 00:17.830 --> 00:21.090 for the introduction we just describe what the whole thing's about. 00:21.450 --> 00:21.740 OK. 00:21.750 --> 00:28.710 So they tell us here up here is as the chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands 00:29.400 --> 00:32.130 in 2009 and 2013. 00:33.000 --> 00:41.220 The chart below shows the global sales of the top five mobile brands in 2009 and 2013 prizes giving 00:41.220 --> 00:44.680 us units sold in the millions. 00:45.540 --> 00:51.350 And this example you know this is you know there's there's a bar chart is units sold in the millions. 00:51.520 --> 00:57.070 And we have three different time periods and we also have four different brands. 00:57.240 --> 00:59.790 So we need to take that information. 01:00.030 --> 01:06.840 We need to take that information and we need to create we to take that information and we need to create 01:06.930 --> 01:08.640 our introduction. 01:08.640 --> 01:13.610 So it's going to be something like this when we're looking at our introduction. 01:14.750 --> 01:16.470 OK. 01:16.550 --> 01:21.170 So let's see. 01:21.180 --> 01:25.100 All right we're going to take all this information and put it together into one introduction. 01:25.100 --> 01:27.180 All right. 02:39.080 --> 02:44.470 Series or introduction now when you look at this introduction one thing I want to look at is this. 02:44.470 --> 02:48.630 Look at it and say to yourself Well what's missing here. 02:48.820 --> 02:54.440 What's missing here is that I should have included right now on pop on purpose I left it out. 02:54.550 --> 02:55.290 I left it out. 02:55.300 --> 02:59.380 I left out the information some information that we should have included in the introduction. 02:59.380 --> 03:03.460 I'm giving you a moment to look at it and to think for yourself. 03:03.490 --> 03:04.060 What does he is. 03:04.060 --> 03:06.010 What is he missing here. 03:06.100 --> 03:07.080 What is he missing here. 03:07.120 --> 03:07.480 Right. 03:07.510 --> 03:11.530 Missing the years should have included the years and I didn't put that in here. 03:11.840 --> 03:12.520 OK. 03:26.570 --> 03:30.260 So we need to look at this sentence and add in the years somewhere. 04:02.340 --> 04:02.740 Right. 04:02.820 --> 04:08.400 And there's our sentence in the box are presented for analysis we can observe the cellular phone sales 04:08.400 --> 04:15.870 and the number of millions doing specific years 2009 2001 and 2013 for four companies in this particular 04:15.870 --> 04:16.530 field. 04:19.770 --> 04:24.730 Now look at this sentence and you can say well how can we make this sentence a little bit better. 04:24.770 --> 04:25.090 Right. 04:25.080 --> 04:27.920 How do we make it a little bit better. 04:28.440 --> 04:29.580 We could do this 05:13.590 --> 05:14.100 right. 05:14.150 --> 05:16.430 And then we just ended right here. 05:16.820 --> 05:17.510 OK. 05:17.810 --> 05:22.420 So I just wanted to end this one to show you a little bit about how you can go about really editing 05:22.420 --> 05:27.020 a sentence or how a sentence can be made better in terms of structure because that's one thing that 05:27.020 --> 05:32.210 students sometimes don't understand that you know you can get it and structure sentences always to be 05:32.210 --> 05:32.930 better. 05:33.110 --> 05:39.320 The first time I wrote it was fine but I want you I want you to see how you can look at how sometimes 05:39.320 --> 05:44.090 you can leave out the information and how if you wanted to include that information what are some things 05:44.090 --> 05:50.210 you can do in terms of restructuring a sentence in terms of sentence structure to be able to include 05:50.210 --> 05:51.970 information and to make it a little bit better. 05:52.010 --> 05:52.660 OK. 05:52.910 --> 05:55.220 So I will talk to you again soon. 05:55.220 --> 05:59.990 We have done our introductions for all the different types and now we're going to move on to doing a 05:59.990 --> 06:04.360 job doing general overview paragraphs for all of our examples. 06:04.400 --> 06:04.760 All right. 06:04.760 --> 06:06.220 So I'll talk to you soon.