OK now let's go ahead and move forward and let's describe our last introduction that we're looking at
which is the introduction for the bar graph.
All right.
So again we're looking at it than what we have to do is we have to look at the bar graph and baseline
for the introduction we just describe what the whole thing's about.
OK.
So they tell us here up here is as the chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands
in 2009 and 2013.
The chart below shows the global sales of the top five mobile brands in 2009 and 2013 prizes giving
us units sold in the millions.
And this example you know this is you know there's there's a bar chart is units sold in the millions.
And we have three different time periods and we also have four different brands.
So we need to take that information.
We need to take that information and we need to create we to take that information and we need to create
our introduction.
So it's going to be something like this when we're looking at our introduction.
OK.
So let's see.
All right we're going to take all this information and put it together into one introduction.
All right.
Series or introduction now when you look at this introduction one thing I want to look at is this.
Look at it and say to yourself Well what's missing here.
What's missing here is that I should have included right now on pop on purpose I left it out.
I left it out.
I left out the information some information that we should have included in the introduction.
I'm giving you a moment to look at it and to think for yourself.
What does he is.
What is he missing here.
Right.
Missing the years should have included the years and I didn't put that in here.
OK.
So we need to look at this sentence and add in the years somewhere.
Right.
And there's our sentence in the box are presented for analysis we can observe the cellular phone sales
and the number of millions doing specific years 2009 2001 and 2013 for four companies in this particular
field.
Now look at this sentence and you can say well how can we make this sentence a little bit better.
Right.
How do we make it a little bit better.
We could do this
right.
And then we just ended right here.
OK.
So I just wanted to end this one to show you a little bit about how you can go about really editing
a sentence or how a sentence can be made better in terms of structure because that's one thing that
students sometimes don't understand that you know you can get it and structure sentences always to be
better.
The first time I wrote it was fine but I want you I want you to see how you can look at how sometimes
you can leave out the information and how if you wanted to include that information what are some things
you can do in terms of restructuring a sentence in terms of sentence structure to be able to include
information and to make it a little bit better.
OK.
So I will talk to you again soon.
We have done our introductions for all the different types and now we're going to move on to doing a
job doing general overview paragraphs for all of our examples.
All right.
So I'll talk to you soon.