WEBVTT 00:00.840 --> 00:02.700 Does anybody have any questions. 00:09.310 --> 00:12.460 Any questions any questions any questions any questions. 00:16.360 --> 00:16.690 No. 00:16.690 --> 00:20.210 So we saw that we saw two really pretty good two pretty good attempts. 00:20.230 --> 00:20.530 Right. 00:20.530 --> 00:21.880 Really good job. 00:21.880 --> 00:23.550 Bassma you Centaurus. 00:24.010 --> 00:27.550 OK one one moment I will I'll try to 00:33.350 --> 00:35.660 we have two more OK Homeside and see those 00:40.140 --> 01:02.980 one moment I will pool these up. 01:04.300 --> 01:04.880 OK. 01:04.900 --> 01:10.810 Let's see here we are present with a bar graph. 01:11.000 --> 01:20.810 Clearly a bar graph should be a bar graph that clearly describes within us the percentage of both gin 01:20.930 --> 01:23.220 of both genders. 01:24.290 --> 01:27.450 Who who their ages. 01:27.560 --> 01:32.270 Who's should be whose ages are divided into six groups. 01:32.630 --> 01:38.210 And they used to do in the six groups. 01:40.530 --> 01:43.100 Yeah you did you did this actually. 01:43.170 --> 01:45.240 Now that's Bassma. 01:45.270 --> 01:48.330 You did a really good job of using synonym language. 01:48.330 --> 01:50.100 There are some grammatical errors. 01:51.160 --> 01:55.920 There are some grammatical errors here in your introduction but your use of synonym language is very 01:55.920 --> 01:56.580 very good. 01:56.600 --> 02:01.600 This is better than the other ones actually but the what's going on here is that you've got you've got 02:01.740 --> 02:03.880 your grammar scores going to be low. 02:04.230 --> 02:09.260 So you have to fix that stuff in terms of the introduction as we can see female. 02:09.260 --> 02:14.600 Again be careful with your capitalization you can not put a capital F with female. 02:14.610 --> 02:18.950 You think those people think is a small idea but just like I notice it right away. 02:18.960 --> 02:25.140 A great example notice it right away and that is a basic English mistake clearly occupied the highest 02:25.140 --> 02:29.940 point the most age group most age groups. 02:29.940 --> 02:33.110 I see us up some issues with your subject verb agreement. 02:33.390 --> 02:45.300 While the male The males are at least our least who did usual show me males did the usual physical activity 02:45.300 --> 02:49.030 the least right so there's a word order problem there. 02:49.470 --> 02:55.820 OK but you do have the general information but again you're having some issues with the word order and 02:56.530 --> 03:10.570 add some grammar things overall if we see eight twenty 25 and where we notice that women's percentages 03:10.580 --> 03:20.230 higher than men doing physical activity as in age groups I think this second paragraph is Jim is that 03:20.260 --> 03:25.380 first sentence that first sentence is general. 03:25.540 --> 03:28.890 You have to make some specific comparisons of numbers. 03:29.290 --> 03:35.760 Females is females are higher extremely extremely higher. 03:35.770 --> 03:43.560 Do they have the switch told they ever goes ferse 5 percent. 03:43.670 --> 03:47.860 I can't make out that last sentence is clearly in terms I can see. 03:47.860 --> 03:56.000 I see the words but I don't understand it quite moving to last age groups females deal enroll at the 03:56.010 --> 03:57.650 highest point in sports. 03:57.710 --> 04:05.230 But so one thing I can see is that you understand structurally what you're supposed to do but you're 04:05.240 --> 04:12.840 writing your grammar and you're writing a sentence in your word choice your word or a have to get better. 04:12.860 --> 04:13.100 All right. 04:13.100 --> 04:17.560 Once once those things get better I think you can put together something really well. 04:17.570 --> 04:23.690 But right now you're really hurting your score because of the grammar and word choice and things like 04:23.690 --> 04:23.830 that. 04:23.840 --> 04:29.360 But structurally you're OK but you have to really improve the overall writing because remember as an 04:29.360 --> 04:31.090 English skills exam. 04:31.490 --> 04:34.300 So you have to be able to improve those skills a little bit more. 04:34.440 --> 04:36.560 OK I think I have one more Hold on please. 04:42.260 --> 04:59.820 The. 05:01.240 --> 05:09.470 All right let's see as we can see this Bartsch describes the percentage will you see this as an exercise 05:09.470 --> 05:10.570 in 2010. 05:10.820 --> 05:12.680 Sort of by gender and group by age. 05:12.680 --> 05:14.800 A good introduction the job. 05:15.230 --> 05:17.380 Be careful with your comma placement. 05:17.630 --> 05:20.130 Right the common goals next to the zero. 05:20.360 --> 05:22.790 And then there's a space after the comma. 05:22.790 --> 05:27.400 Again you don't think it's in poor with as basic You got to do it right. 05:27.440 --> 05:29.550 Maybe it's a little baby you're typing on a phone. 05:31.170 --> 05:32.440 Maybe that's why it's happening. 05:32.520 --> 05:33.080 OK. 05:33.270 --> 05:41.160 In general this chart shows different genders different genders different genders with an ass starting 05:41.160 --> 05:46.150 from age 15 ending with over 65 divided by six states. 05:46.470 --> 05:52.230 This information is not general information this information is actually still Pyra introduction if 05:52.230 --> 05:54.910 you want it to right. 05:55.050 --> 05:58.940 This this information. 05:59.790 --> 06:02.190 And there's no you think you're typing on a phone. 06:02.190 --> 06:04.090 There's no there's no periods. 06:04.110 --> 06:12.020 Also you didn't get a chance to finish you are headed in the right direction with the last paragraph. 06:12.040 --> 06:14.310 But you didn't get a chance to finish it. 06:14.420 --> 06:19.710 All right let's take a look at mine. 06:23.430 --> 06:40.530 And let's see if I can show you my comparison's. 06:41.140 --> 06:42.910 You make the writing bigger. 06:42.910 --> 07:02.020 Hold on. 07:02.040 --> 07:06.310 So going to take a look at mine. 07:23.990 --> 07:24.280 Right. 07:24.280 --> 07:26.920 Take a look at mine do something I need to change. 07:28.470 --> 07:29.780 Should be 44 07:37.180 --> 07:39.460 should be 44 or 07:46.080 --> 07:54.510 so provided 2016 details a percentage of routine Corporal exercise of Australian ladies and gentlemen 07:54.540 --> 07:57.390 who range from 15 to over 65. 07:57.390 --> 08:01.190 We can clearly know from 15 to 44 Mehler exercise daily drops. 08:01.200 --> 08:06.840 But for women the opposite is true as we can witness an increase year to year in general from 44 to 08:06.840 --> 08:09.180 65 or 65. 08:09.180 --> 08:15.990 The women and men the men and women switch their progress with the women in a state of decline in the 08:15.990 --> 08:20.030 man increasing their activity from 15 to 34. 08:20.040 --> 08:26.010 The male percentage drops by ten point six percent whereas women have a minor uptake by 1.2 percent 08:26.010 --> 08:27.370 in the same period. 08:27.690 --> 08:34.800 In the age range of 25 to 44 the men have a much smaller fall by less than three percent and the women 08:34.800 --> 08:40.250 continue their upward activity swing with a rise of a little more than three percent. 08:40.500 --> 08:48.030 For this specific period of 15 to 44 the male fitness actions fall by around 13 percent and the women 08:48.030 --> 08:55.470 slowly rise a little less than 5 percent over this total period from 44 to 64 man start to become more 08:55.470 --> 09:01.290 active and we could see this with the rise from thirty nine point five to forty five point fifteen almost 09:01.290 --> 09:11.500 6 percent during the same period the lady's activity starts to Furse rise to me rises should be ferse 09:11.860 --> 09:17.780 starts the first rise less than 1 percent to fifty three point five. 09:18.040 --> 09:23.280 And then my newly drops to 53 percent in the range of 55 to 64. 09:23.380 --> 09:27.080 We find the women to have about 8 percent more physical activity. 09:27.310 --> 09:34.000 However in the final care category up of over 65 the two genders are almost equal with a difference 09:34.000 --> 09:37.270 of less than 1 percent. 09:37.380 --> 09:43.780 So if you see I have my four paragraph structure in terms of what does it all about. 09:43.950 --> 09:45.490 I think my introduction could have been better. 09:45.490 --> 09:48.020 I think somebody wrote an introduction better than my best smile. 09:48.060 --> 09:52.500 I like your introduction you just have messed up your grammar wasn't good. 09:52.710 --> 10:00.420 I really liked her introduction then my general and then my two paragraphs where I really make specific 10:00.420 --> 10:06.740 comparisons of the ME and the women man vs. man women versus women. 10:06.750 --> 10:12.590 Men Against Women really make all the different types of comparisons OK. 10:13.170 --> 10:19.130 All right so that is an example of what mine looks like. 10:19.500 --> 10:28.160 All right so does does anybody and again when I wrote mine I wrote it in actual real time. 10:28.620 --> 10:33.690 And it looks like I made a couple of errors here or there that needs to be changed but I want to be 10:33.690 --> 10:39.150 able to show you what and when I do an example like this for a live class. 10:39.240 --> 10:45.540 I want to write it under the same time conditions that you're going to write it so you can see that 10:45.540 --> 10:50.640 even for this this will be a 9 but a 9 doesn't have to be perfect they're going to be some mistakes 10:50.640 --> 10:55.290 here or there because you can't get it all within 20 minutes sometimes. 10:55.740 --> 11:03.630 But this is what you're going to have to be able to do is to do it this type of way in terms in terms 11:03.630 --> 11:07.220 of your in terms of your writing. 11:07.440 --> 11:10.690 To answer your question that you just asked me. 11:10.920 --> 11:16.830 Yes I don't know exactly right now when I'm going to do another task to when I did a task to one a few 11:16.830 --> 11:18.770 weeks ago. 11:19.830 --> 11:24.000 But I will probably end up doing another one in the near future. 11:24.020 --> 11:25.020 All right. 11:25.190 --> 11:35.360 OK so I hope everybody has a deeper understanding of how to do task number one. 11:35.370 --> 11:40.980 I'm happy that you had an opportunity to practice doing task number one you saw my writing you saw some 11:40.980 --> 11:42.610 examples. 11:42.610 --> 11:49.410 All right so before we close close shop does anybody have any other questions about to ask. 11:49.410 --> 11:49.970 Number one 11:52.830 --> 11:54.670 the live the live class. 11:54.670 --> 12:03.130 When I did the class for test two in the past the recording didn't come out great and so I did not upload 12:03.130 --> 12:08.020 it because the recording went for that live class did not come out the way I wanted to in terms of the 12:08.020 --> 12:09.500 quality of the recording. 12:09.820 --> 12:12.850 So that's why I am going to do another task to 12:15.590 --> 12:19.850 because I want to be able to do a recording that can be listened to very well. 12:19.850 --> 12:22.870 So yes all right any other questions. 12:22.880 --> 12:25.100 Best of my health can improve my grammar. 12:25.520 --> 12:33.090 Yeah that's more of that's more like a what you need like a tutor for. 12:33.450 --> 12:37.910 Or you can take a UDMA class for grammar but really you probably would need a personal tutor. 12:38.860 --> 12:41.910 For your grammar. 12:42.470 --> 12:50.260 You know that's really like that's like a ESL English issue and you need somebody that can really sit 12:50.260 --> 12:56.230 down with you and really helped you go through mastering and correcting your grammar because you need 12:56.230 --> 13:03.130 you need specific personal attention to your grammar issues because if you fix that that's going to 13:03.130 --> 13:05.780 help you in terms of being able to improve your score. 13:06.740 --> 13:08.190 A lot. 13:08.440 --> 13:10.120 And also your word order. 13:10.120 --> 13:10.920 Things like that. 13:10.930 --> 13:18.070 All that stuff matters because it is the quality of your writing that really matters the most because 13:18.070 --> 13:25.450 if you look at the way you look at the Grade Chart right task task response is one thing is one part. 13:25.450 --> 13:33.280 The other three parts are coherent lexical and grammar right. 13:33.440 --> 13:39.200 So there are good desk quality writing that they're looking at task with task with spazzes just one 13:39.200 --> 13:40.190 part out of four 13:44.910 --> 13:48.170 which will be the next class. 13:50.220 --> 13:56.400 In turn there's another there's the next class I'm doing there's one next week. 13:56.800 --> 14:00.360 But that's for the general letter and for the academic. 14:00.370 --> 14:01.350 I'm not sure right now. 14:01.360 --> 14:05.920 I have uploaded some of the past academic ones and of course right now for the reading the academic 14:05.920 --> 14:06.770 reading. 14:07.510 --> 14:11.140 And we had the we had the listening today. 14:11.320 --> 14:17.560 So in terms of the next slide the next slide our next live class after the general letter that I do 14:17.560 --> 14:19.160 next week I have due next week. 14:19.180 --> 14:24.370 I haven't planned it yet but there will be an announcement when it comes up after that. 14:24.370 --> 14:24.730 All right. 14:24.730 --> 14:26.060 So thank you. 14:26.080 --> 14:29.350 Thank you very much everybody for joining me today. 14:29.810 --> 14:32.350 I appreciate your participation. 14:32.960 --> 14:40.800 And I hope that you have a chance to learn a lot more about how to do the academic Isle's test of one. 14:40.820 --> 14:41.920 So thanks a lot. 14:42.020 --> 14:44.490 And keep working hard and take care. 14:44.570 --> 14:44.990 All right. 14:45.080 --> 14:45.900 Thank you very much. 14:45.950 --> 14:47.390 And have a wonderful day. 14:48.470 --> 14:49.930 Wherever you are in the world 15:03.120 --> 15:05.310 this class will be uploaded. 15:05.370 --> 15:06.060 OK. 15:06.240 --> 15:07.560 This one will be uploaded. 15:07.560 --> 15:12.290 I just have to process it and divide it into 20 minute parts and things like that. 15:12.300 --> 15:13.230 But it will be uploaded.