Does anybody have any questions.
Any questions any questions any questions any questions.
No.
So we saw that we saw two really pretty good two pretty good attempts.
Right.
Really good job.
Bassma you Centaurus.
OK one one moment I will I'll try to
we have two more OK Homeside and see those
one moment I will pool these up.
OK.
Let's see here we are present with a bar graph.
Clearly a bar graph should be a bar graph that clearly describes within us the percentage of both gin
of both genders.
Who who their ages.
Who's should be whose ages are divided into six groups.
And they used to do in the six groups.
Yeah you did you did this actually.
Now that's Bassma.
You did a really good job of using synonym language.
There are some grammatical errors.
There are some grammatical errors here in your introduction but your use of synonym language is very
very good.
This is better than the other ones actually but the what's going on here is that you've got you've got
your grammar scores going to be low.
So you have to fix that stuff in terms of the introduction as we can see female.
Again be careful with your capitalization you can not put a capital F with female.
You think those people think is a small idea but just like I notice it right away.
A great example notice it right away and that is a basic English mistake clearly occupied the highest
point the most age group most age groups.
I see us up some issues with your subject verb agreement.
While the male The males are at least our least who did usual show me males did the usual physical activity
the least right so there's a word order problem there.
OK but you do have the general information but again you're having some issues with the word order and
add some grammar things overall if we see eight twenty 25 and where we notice that women's percentages
higher than men doing physical activity as in age groups I think this second paragraph is Jim is that
first sentence that first sentence is general.
You have to make some specific comparisons of numbers.
Females is females are higher extremely extremely higher.
Do they have the switch told they ever goes ferse 5 percent.
I can't make out that last sentence is clearly in terms I can see.
I see the words but I don't understand it quite moving to last age groups females deal enroll at the
highest point in sports.
But so one thing I can see is that you understand structurally what you're supposed to do but you're
writing your grammar and you're writing a sentence in your word choice your word or a have to get better.
All right.
Once once those things get better I think you can put together something really well.
But right now you're really hurting your score because of the grammar and word choice and things like
that.
But structurally you're OK but you have to really improve the overall writing because remember as an
English skills exam.
So you have to be able to improve those skills a little bit more.
OK I think I have one more Hold on please.
The.
All right let's see as we can see this Bartsch describes the percentage will you see this as an exercise
in 2010.
Sort of by gender and group by age.
A good introduction the job.
Be careful with your comma placement.
Right the common goals next to the zero.
And then there's a space after the comma.
Again you don't think it's in poor with as basic You got to do it right.
Maybe it's a little baby you're typing on a phone.
Maybe that's why it's happening.
OK.
In general this chart shows different genders different genders different genders with an ass starting
from age 15 ending with over 65 divided by six states.
This information is not general information this information is actually still Pyra introduction if
you want it to right.
This this information.
And there's no you think you're typing on a phone.
There's no there's no periods.
Also you didn't get a chance to finish you are headed in the right direction with the last paragraph.
But you didn't get a chance to finish it.
All right let's take a look at mine.
And let's see if I can show you my comparison's.
You make the writing bigger.
Hold on.
So going to take a look at mine.
Right.
Take a look at mine do something I need to change.
Should be 44
should be 44 or
so provided 2016 details a percentage of routine Corporal exercise of Australian ladies and gentlemen
who range from 15 to over 65.
We can clearly know from 15 to 44 Mehler exercise daily drops.
But for women the opposite is true as we can witness an increase year to year in general from 44 to
65 or 65.
The women and men the men and women switch their progress with the women in a state of decline in the
man increasing their activity from 15 to 34.
The male percentage drops by ten point six percent whereas women have a minor uptake by 1.2 percent
in the same period.
In the age range of 25 to 44 the men have a much smaller fall by less than three percent and the women
continue their upward activity swing with a rise of a little more than three percent.
For this specific period of 15 to 44 the male fitness actions fall by around 13 percent and the women
slowly rise a little less than 5 percent over this total period from 44 to 64 man start to become more
active and we could see this with the rise from thirty nine point five to forty five point fifteen almost
6 percent during the same period the lady's activity starts to Furse rise to me rises should be ferse
starts the first rise less than 1 percent to fifty three point five.
And then my newly drops to 53 percent in the range of 55 to 64.
We find the women to have about 8 percent more physical activity.
However in the final care category up of over 65 the two genders are almost equal with a difference
of less than 1 percent.
So if you see I have my four paragraph structure in terms of what does it all about.
I think my introduction could have been better.
I think somebody wrote an introduction better than my best smile.
I like your introduction you just have messed up your grammar wasn't good.
I really liked her introduction then my general and then my two paragraphs where I really make specific
comparisons of the ME and the women man vs. man women versus women.
Men Against Women really make all the different types of comparisons OK.
All right so that is an example of what mine looks like.
All right so does does anybody and again when I wrote mine I wrote it in actual real time.
And it looks like I made a couple of errors here or there that needs to be changed but I want to be
able to show you what and when I do an example like this for a live class.
I want to write it under the same time conditions that you're going to write it so you can see that
even for this this will be a 9 but a 9 doesn't have to be perfect they're going to be some mistakes
here or there because you can't get it all within 20 minutes sometimes.
But this is what you're going to have to be able to do is to do it this type of way in terms in terms
of your in terms of your writing.
To answer your question that you just asked me.
Yes I don't know exactly right now when I'm going to do another task to when I did a task to one a few
weeks ago.
But I will probably end up doing another one in the near future.
All right.
OK so I hope everybody has a deeper understanding of how to do task number one.
I'm happy that you had an opportunity to practice doing task number one you saw my writing you saw some
examples.
All right so before we close close shop does anybody have any other questions about to ask.
Number one
the live the live class.
When I did the class for test two in the past the recording didn't come out great and so I did not upload
it because the recording went for that live class did not come out the way I wanted to in terms of the
quality of the recording.
So that's why I am going to do another task to
because I want to be able to do a recording that can be listened to very well.
So yes all right any other questions.
Best of my health can improve my grammar.
Yeah that's more of that's more like a what you need like a tutor for.
Or you can take a UDMA class for grammar but really you probably would need a personal tutor.
For your grammar.
You know that's really like that's like a ESL English issue and you need somebody that can really sit
down with you and really helped you go through mastering and correcting your grammar because you need
you need specific personal attention to your grammar issues because if you fix that that's going to
help you in terms of being able to improve your score.
A lot.
And also your word order.
Things like that.
All that stuff matters because it is the quality of your writing that really matters the most because
if you look at the way you look at the Grade Chart right task task response is one thing is one part.
The other three parts are coherent lexical and grammar right.
So there are good desk quality writing that they're looking at task with task with spazzes just one
part out of four
which will be the next class.
In turn there's another there's the next class I'm doing there's one next week.
But that's for the general letter and for the academic.
I'm not sure right now.
I have uploaded some of the past academic ones and of course right now for the reading the academic
reading.
And we had the we had the listening today.
So in terms of the next slide the next slide our next live class after the general letter that I do
next week I have due next week.
I haven't planned it yet but there will be an announcement when it comes up after that.
All right.
So thank you.
Thank you very much everybody for joining me today.
I appreciate your participation.
And I hope that you have a chance to learn a lot more about how to do the academic Isle's test of one.
So thanks a lot.
And keep working hard and take care.
All right.
Thank you very much.
And have a wonderful day.
Wherever you are in the world
this class will be uploaded.
OK.
This one will be uploaded.
I just have to process it and divide it into 20 minute parts and things like that.
But it will be uploaded.