Your best to do that because if you're if you're eight if you're here able to avoid that your grammar
level and your vocabulary level is going to look much much higher much higher.
OK.
So that's my general paragraph you see is only two sentences the first sentence addresses the pie chart.
And the second sentence addresses the table.
All right there are no percentages there.
We're talking about just some general obvious things that I see.
All right.
Now before I move on to my specific comparisons Does anybody have any questions.
All right.
Ahmad might see your paragraph your paragraph is actually pretty good also.
Yeah imagine you did a good job.
The only thing in mind.
OK your first one is the table.
It looks like a lot and the same ideas from yours.
Generally the majority of the waste in both Malaysia and UK is to pose waste.
All right in your very first sentence the very first part of your sentence.
Scuse me I look at it several times I didn't know if you were talking about the pie chart or the table
OK.
So just be careful that you label it correctly.
OK.
All right good.
All right so before I move on to see OK good.
So nobody else has any questions or anything right now.
No.
All right.
So I disremember what I said in terms of being able to in terms of being able to.
Does anybody want me let me say this also.
Does anybody want me to take a moment and email you this graph I'm looking at e-mail it.
E-mail it to you and you can look at it on your own from your computer.
I want me to do that.
You can look at your own copy of this of his graph
because the reason why I say that is once once I start typing out my my specific paragraphs you're not
going to be able to see the chart.
OK so Ido wants me to send it.
OK.
All right.
So everybody does.
We're going to take a I'm going to take a break for like four for four minutes four or five minutes
and I'm going to send this chart.
I'm going in the charts that we're covering today and within this one within this chart so that you'll
be able to look at it on your own.
Well I'm doing this right so you don't have to send me.
You don't have to send me your
well the last live whole of the last live session actually are uploaded into the course.
If you look in the course all you'll see under the task too for writing you'll see that I uploaded all
those in there.
They get the core classes and they're OK.
And so you can see everything in there.
OK so we're about to take a five minute break so I can send you this chart so you can look at it on
your own.
OK so a step way for five minutes.
OK everybody I just e-mailed.
I just e-mailed it to you.
So there you go look at this graph that I'm looking at right now.
So I've done the introduction and I have done I've done the introduction and I've done the the general
the journal paragraph.
The next thing I'm going to write is I'm going to write my first specific comperes and now whether to
chart graph like you have here I recommend splitting it splitting it.
Right.
So you would talk about the pie charts us in terms of comparisons and then afterwards in the fourth
paragraph you would talk about the table.
OK.
So just we're going to split it.
So the first specific comparisons are going to be about the pie chart and the next set of specific comparisons
is going to be about the table itself.
Okay.
Now one thing I'm going to do in an effort for you to be able to to see it is I'm going to tie my third
paragraph.
I want to move my introduction in general down.
And I'm going to type my third paragraph right here.
Okay.
I'm going to take my third paragraph right here.
That way you can see it directly with the pie chart you can see it while I'm typing it.
And then at the end after I finished everything I'll put everything back together where it should be
OK.
All right.
So
I see.
All right.
So good.
All right so no questions.
OK everybody so I am going to go ahead and write my first specific comparison paragraph about the pie
charts and then afterwards if you have any questions you can be sure to ask me anything that you want
to ask me.
OK.
All right.
So I'm about to start writing.
Now
OK everybody there is my third paragraph where I am doing my comparisons within the pie chart.
You all didn't tell me you can't see I'm sorry Armato me couldn't see but sorry about I forgot to share
my screen.
OK.
All right so everybody there now you can see a lot of sorry that's what you were talking about before
you couldn't see anything.
I stopped sharing the screen.
So everyone there you can see my paragraph that I was typing I'm sorry that you weren't able to see
me typing it while I was typing it.
I forgot to turn on the screen share.
Anyway there is my paragraph.
And again you'll note in my paragraph that you don't see me using any Beevor's right.
You see me using really good verbs like I said I think it's a really really good idea a really good
idea to really try your best to avoid the usage of any B verbs and really those auxilary and helping
verbs as much as possible because it's going to force you or make you to use better verb choices and
make better word choices which is going to get you a much higher grade.
So when you look at my paragraph it says based on the year 2000 pie chart a 50 percent difference existed
at that time when the biggest was recycling and the smallest Malaysia next the USA at 50 percent managed
waste using landfills more than three times the percentage of how the UK use that process as a final
note on the pie chart in comparison to the UK in Malaysia's 45 percent usage rate.
The USA use this use the Dispose technique 25 percent less than those countries.
OK.
Ola.
I did not delete the intro.
What I said was I.
I just move the intro and the overview paragraph down below so that you'll be able to see my third paragraph.
What I'm seeing in comparison to the chart while I'm while it's there ok but I didn't I didn't delete
it.
What I'm going to end up doing isn't one and I'm moving this paragraph and putting it in the right space
but I'm trying to put my paragraph in the chart in the same space so that you all can see and look at
the numbers that I'm using and where I'm getting those numbers from.
OK.
All right.
So does anybody have any questions at all about what I've done.
Somebody wrote something and we take a look at it.
See somebody did some more of his take a look at it everybody
in mind when you're doing this.
This is from.
This is from something that Emaar is done from the pie chart in both Malaysia and the U.K. the highest
percentage of ways of course dispose of waste what a loss percentage like this first sentence.
This first sentence you're not really making any comparisons.
There's no comparison to you.
I mean you're you're you're.
I see that right.
I see those numbers but when you're talking about highs and lows where does where does highest what
where does discussion of what was the highest and what was the lowest where does that discussion go.
That discussion really goes into a general overview paragraph.
Right.
All you did was basically you wrote another general overview paragraph you told me what was the highest
and what was the lowest.
And then he told me what was the highest and the lowest for the land field and he told me what was the
highest and lowest for them to dispose waste.
Where do we wish it were not just not about what's the highest and what's the lowest right now discussion
of what's the highest and what's the lowest is a general overview discussion right compare these different
numbers.
They're all all these different numbers you could have compared.
Right you could have talked about how the USA uses recycled five percent more than Malaysia and 15 percent.
Compare the numbers make comparisons of numbers don't just state the obvious.
OK so you've got to be very careful with how you're doing it because what you did here was just state
the obvious.
They want to see your ability to compare numbers
OK.
Now
what I'm going to do now is I'm going to go ahead and move this paragraph into its right spot
OK.
It would technically go right there.
OK.
And excuse me.