WEBVTT 00:00.210 --> 00:06.330 Your best to do that because if you're if you're eight if you're here able to avoid that your grammar 00:06.330 --> 00:11.480 level and your vocabulary level is going to look much much higher much higher. 00:11.850 --> 00:12.520 OK. 00:12.690 --> 00:19.350 So that's my general paragraph you see is only two sentences the first sentence addresses the pie chart. 00:20.040 --> 00:23.340 And the second sentence addresses the table. 00:23.340 --> 00:25.410 All right there are no percentages there. 00:25.440 --> 00:28.800 We're talking about just some general obvious things that I see. 00:28.840 --> 00:29.610 All right. 00:29.770 --> 00:47.360 Now before I move on to my specific comparisons Does anybody have any questions. 00:47.910 --> 00:50.150 All right. 00:50.430 --> 00:55.360 Ahmad might see your paragraph your paragraph is actually pretty good also. 00:57.040 --> 00:58.780 Yeah imagine you did a good job. 01:09.560 --> 01:10.880 The only thing in mind. 01:10.980 --> 01:15.230 OK your first one is the table. 01:15.430 --> 01:18.820 It looks like a lot and the same ideas from yours. 01:21.330 --> 01:30.630 Generally the majority of the waste in both Malaysia and UK is to pose waste. 01:30.710 --> 01:35.800 All right in your very first sentence the very first part of your sentence. 01:36.010 --> 01:39.730 Scuse me I look at it several times I didn't know if you were talking about the pie chart or the table 01:42.490 --> 01:42.800 OK. 01:42.810 --> 01:45.690 So just be careful that you label it correctly. 01:50.020 --> 01:50.600 OK. 01:50.630 --> 01:51.470 All right good. 01:51.710 --> 01:56.710 All right so before I move on to see OK good. 01:56.720 --> 01:59.480 So nobody else has any questions or anything right now. 02:00.620 --> 02:01.600 No. 02:01.640 --> 02:01.910 All right. 02:01.910 --> 02:09.450 So I disremember what I said in terms of being able to in terms of being able to. 02:09.450 --> 02:12.050 Does anybody want me let me say this also. 02:12.180 --> 02:20.600 Does anybody want me to take a moment and email you this graph I'm looking at e-mail it. 02:20.610 --> 02:24.220 E-mail it to you and you can look at it on your own from your computer. 02:24.270 --> 02:25.450 I want me to do that. 02:27.600 --> 02:29.970 You can look at your own copy of this of his graph 02:32.690 --> 02:42.590 because the reason why I say that is once once I start typing out my my specific paragraphs you're not 02:42.590 --> 02:44.380 going to be able to see the chart. 02:44.900 --> 02:49.160 OK so Ido wants me to send it. 02:49.580 --> 02:50.370 OK. 02:50.720 --> 02:51.190 All right. 02:51.350 --> 02:53.680 So everybody does. 02:54.290 --> 03:02.420 We're going to take a I'm going to take a break for like four for four minutes four or five minutes 03:03.080 --> 03:06.120 and I'm going to send this chart. 03:06.520 --> 03:11.390 I'm going in the charts that we're covering today and within this one within this chart so that you'll 03:11.390 --> 03:12.950 be able to look at it on your own. 03:12.950 --> 03:18.460 Well I'm doing this right so you don't have to send me. 03:18.610 --> 03:20.590 You don't have to send me your 03:24.360 --> 03:30.370 well the last live whole of the last live session actually are uploaded into the course. 03:30.570 --> 03:37.890 If you look in the course all you'll see under the task too for writing you'll see that I uploaded all 03:37.920 --> 03:39.310 those in there. 03:39.460 --> 03:41.830 They get the core classes and they're OK. 03:42.240 --> 03:44.520 And so you can see everything in there. 03:44.550 --> 03:48.480 OK so we're about to take a five minute break so I can send you this chart so you can look at it on 03:48.480 --> 03:48.900 your own. 03:48.930 --> 03:51.240 OK so a step way for five minutes. 03:54.720 --> 03:58.820 OK everybody I just e-mailed. 03:59.220 --> 04:01.040 I just e-mailed it to you. 04:01.170 --> 04:04.470 So there you go look at this graph that I'm looking at right now. 04:05.310 --> 04:16.830 So I've done the introduction and I have done I've done the introduction and I've done the the general 04:17.400 --> 04:19.200 the journal paragraph. 04:19.200 --> 04:25.050 The next thing I'm going to write is I'm going to write my first specific comperes and now whether to 04:25.050 --> 04:31.440 chart graph like you have here I recommend splitting it splitting it. 04:31.470 --> 04:32.020 Right. 04:32.250 --> 04:38.790 So you would talk about the pie charts us in terms of comparisons and then afterwards in the fourth 04:38.790 --> 04:40.680 paragraph you would talk about the table. 04:40.940 --> 04:41.600 OK. 04:41.820 --> 04:43.650 So just we're going to split it. 04:43.650 --> 04:49.080 So the first specific comparisons are going to be about the pie chart and the next set of specific comparisons 04:49.080 --> 04:51.090 is going to be about the table itself. 04:51.600 --> 04:52.010 Okay. 04:52.020 --> 05:01.560 Now one thing I'm going to do in an effort for you to be able to to see it is I'm going to tie my third 05:01.560 --> 05:03.210 paragraph. 05:03.390 --> 05:06.510 I want to move my introduction in general down. 05:06.690 --> 05:10.010 And I'm going to type my third paragraph right here. 05:10.940 --> 05:11.670 Okay. 05:12.610 --> 05:14.960 I'm going to take my third paragraph right here. 05:15.310 --> 05:22.120 That way you can see it directly with the pie chart you can see it while I'm typing it. 05:22.450 --> 05:28.960 And then at the end after I finished everything I'll put everything back together where it should be 05:29.550 --> 05:30.880 OK. 05:30.940 --> 05:31.370 All right. 05:31.370 --> 05:31.850 So 05:34.570 --> 05:35.670 I see. 05:35.790 --> 05:36.090 All right. 05:36.090 --> 05:37.200 So good. 05:39.700 --> 05:40.960 All right so no questions. 05:40.960 --> 05:47.170 OK everybody so I am going to go ahead and write my first specific comparison paragraph about the pie 05:47.170 --> 05:53.560 charts and then afterwards if you have any questions you can be sure to ask me anything that you want 05:53.560 --> 05:54.530 to ask me. 05:54.610 --> 05:55.150 OK. 05:55.240 --> 05:55.590 All right. 05:55.630 --> 05:57.970 So I'm about to start writing. 05:58.240 --> 05:58.740 Now 10:32.790 --> 10:42.280 OK everybody there is my third paragraph where I am doing my comparisons within the pie chart. 10:45.970 --> 10:53.170 You all didn't tell me you can't see I'm sorry Armato me couldn't see but sorry about I forgot to share 10:53.170 --> 10:54.280 my screen. 10:54.790 --> 10:55.560 OK. 10:55.840 --> 11:02.210 All right so everybody there now you can see a lot of sorry that's what you were talking about before 11:02.210 --> 11:04.210 you couldn't see anything. 11:04.230 --> 11:05.700 I stopped sharing the screen. 11:05.710 --> 11:15.580 So everyone there you can see my paragraph that I was typing I'm sorry that you weren't able to see 11:15.580 --> 11:18.060 me typing it while I was typing it. 11:18.160 --> 11:22.090 I forgot to turn on the screen share. 11:22.460 --> 11:27.420 Anyway there is my paragraph. 11:27.910 --> 11:41.360 And again you'll note in my paragraph that you don't see me using any Beevor's right. 11:41.500 --> 11:49.720 You see me using really good verbs like I said I think it's a really really good idea a really good 11:49.720 --> 11:59.290 idea to really try your best to avoid the usage of any B verbs and really those auxilary and helping 11:59.290 --> 12:06.600 verbs as much as possible because it's going to force you or make you to use better verb choices and 12:06.630 --> 12:10.420 make better word choices which is going to get you a much higher grade. 12:11.230 --> 12:17.180 So when you look at my paragraph it says based on the year 2000 pie chart a 50 percent difference existed 12:17.180 --> 12:23.490 at that time when the biggest was recycling and the smallest Malaysia next the USA at 50 percent managed 12:23.500 --> 12:30.760 waste using landfills more than three times the percentage of how the UK use that process as a final 12:30.760 --> 12:35.940 note on the pie chart in comparison to the UK in Malaysia's 45 percent usage rate. 12:35.950 --> 12:41.320 The USA use this use the Dispose technique 25 percent less than those countries. 12:41.320 --> 12:42.110 OK. 12:44.070 --> 12:44.740 Ola. 12:44.790 --> 12:46.730 I did not delete the intro. 12:47.130 --> 12:49.250 What I said was I. 12:49.530 --> 12:58.290 I just move the intro and the overview paragraph down below so that you'll be able to see my third paragraph. 12:58.290 --> 13:05.140 What I'm seeing in comparison to the chart while I'm while it's there ok but I didn't I didn't delete 13:05.140 --> 13:05.780 it. 13:06.060 --> 13:10.840 What I'm going to end up doing isn't one and I'm moving this paragraph and putting it in the right space 13:11.350 --> 13:18.340 but I'm trying to put my paragraph in the chart in the same space so that you all can see and look at 13:18.340 --> 13:21.020 the numbers that I'm using and where I'm getting those numbers from. 13:21.310 --> 13:22.510 OK. 13:23.410 --> 13:24.550 All right. 13:24.660 --> 13:34.030 So does anybody have any questions at all about what I've done. 13:44.820 --> 13:46.940 Somebody wrote something and we take a look at it. 14:16.680 --> 14:20.020 See somebody did some more of his take a look at it everybody 14:35.420 --> 14:38.070 in mind when you're doing this. 14:38.130 --> 14:38.720 This is from. 14:38.730 --> 14:44.580 This is from something that Emaar is done from the pie chart in both Malaysia and the U.K. the highest 14:44.580 --> 14:50.670 percentage of ways of course dispose of waste what a loss percentage like this first sentence. 14:50.970 --> 14:55.630 This first sentence you're not really making any comparisons. 14:56.550 --> 14:57.630 There's no comparison to you. 14:57.630 --> 14:58.930 I mean you're you're you're. 14:59.100 --> 15:00.380 I see that right. 15:00.390 --> 15:05.110 I see those numbers but when you're talking about highs and lows where does where does highest what 15:05.170 --> 15:10.580 where does discussion of what was the highest and what was the lowest where does that discussion go. 15:11.070 --> 15:18.570 That discussion really goes into a general overview paragraph. 15:18.730 --> 15:19.450 Right. 15:19.750 --> 15:27.600 All you did was basically you wrote another general overview paragraph you told me what was the highest 15:27.600 --> 15:29.160 and what was the lowest. 15:29.380 --> 15:32.850 And then he told me what was the highest and the lowest for the land field and he told me what was the 15:32.850 --> 15:35.750 highest and lowest for them to dispose waste. 15:36.000 --> 15:42.300 Where do we wish it were not just not about what's the highest and what's the lowest right now discussion 15:42.300 --> 15:47.670 of what's the highest and what's the lowest is a general overview discussion right compare these different 15:47.670 --> 15:48.150 numbers. 15:48.150 --> 15:51.480 They're all all these different numbers you could have compared. 15:51.650 --> 15:59.920 Right you could have talked about how the USA uses recycled five percent more than Malaysia and 15 percent. 16:00.000 --> 16:05.390 Compare the numbers make comparisons of numbers don't just state the obvious. 16:05.860 --> 16:10.770 OK so you've got to be very careful with how you're doing it because what you did here was just state 16:10.770 --> 16:14.260 the obvious. 16:14.400 --> 16:16.930 They want to see your ability to compare numbers 16:20.310 --> 16:21.090 OK. 16:21.370 --> 16:21.910 Now 16:26.470 --> 16:34.750 what I'm going to do now is I'm going to go ahead and move this paragraph into its right spot 16:39.110 --> 16:40.380 OK. 16:40.770 --> 16:43.150 It would technically go right there. 16:47.100 --> 16:48.090 OK. 16:48.800 --> 16:51.040 And excuse me.