We'll look at the next one.
All right.
So this next one that I'm going to be doing is a diagram and so a diagram is treated the same way as
a two chart or a process or a line.
I'm going to be going through the same steps I'm going to be doing an introduction.
I'm going to be doing a general overview.
I'm going to be doing some specific comparisons of things on the diagrams for this diagram.
We have a present day lay out and we have a future plan.
So the top one is a present day lay out of what they have right now in terms of the university sports
center and the bottom one is a future plan for them to redevelop or redesign the university sports center.
So our first job.
Excuse me.
Our first job is to write an introduction.
And so that's what you're going to see me do right now is write the introduction.
This just explains what we see in front of us.
OK.
All right.
And then after that introduction I will take any questions about it and then move forward.
All right.
So I'm going to turn off my mike and I'm going to type my sentence and then I'll come back.
All right.
I have finished my introduction.
What I did was this is the the language.
I'd already sent this to everybody but I'm putting my introduction right Ron putting the language that
they use in my introduction right next to each other so you can really see the language that I'm using.
And you can see how I'm using synonyms and how I'm saying the same thing but I'm saying in a different
way.
I I'm saying the same thing but I'm saying it in a different way.
Right.
You don't see me using the word center you see me using the word facility.
You don't see me using the word layout you see me use the worse schematic.
You don't see me using the word redevelopment you see me using the word overall using using the word
design.
OK.
So
that's what it means to use synonyms language.
That's what it means to be able to paraphrase they love paraphrasing because it's a high level English
skill.
And every part of the exam is an English test right.
Every part of the Isles exam is opportunity for you to show the graters the level of your English ability.
All the diagrams below illustrate the difference between the current construction of the universe first
and then the expected plan for the upcoming years.
Very good although I like yours
all you did a pretty good job.
Like yours all of us all this is different than my all is different than mine but she did a pretty good
job.
I do wish all that would capitalize her t at the beginning of her sentence but I don't know why Holder
won't do that.
All this should capitalize.
All right.
The diagrams below illustrate the difference between the current construction of university sports.
Like I said although I would have I wouldn't use the word center.
I would have gone ahead and use these.
A synonym and facilty and explain the plan for the upcoming years.
Right.
That's it as is.
Yours is different than my right yours is different than mine.
But I would have you know I would have definitely put my com in there before and I would have capitalized
the T and I would have taken out Center and put in facility.
But that's a good introduction is different than my but it's solid.
OK all right good.
OK so does anybody have any questions about the introduction right.
Our plan doesn't change.
We do the same plan now when we when we take away all those right now when we're doing our general overview
for a diagram we're trying to look at some common things that we see maybe between both things.
All right some common things that we see.
So I mean is this the way I write my paragraph.
Maybe you'll get a better idea of what I'm talking about.
But we still have to do a general overview right before we get into any specific differences.
Let's go ahead and do a general overview.
General what are some obvious things that are generally jump out to us.
All right.
So I'm going to go ahead and write my paragraph and you're welcome to try to do the same.
And then we will keep rolling along.
OK everybody so there you have it.
That is my general overview.
You could take a look at my general overview and let me know if you have any questions about it.
Somebody else asked the question that I need to.
Can we say below or above about the figures that we need to describe it as it will not be in the exam
paper shall we say above or can we say below or above.
Can you give me an example.
I need you to give me more of a specific example of what you're talking about.
Right.
Write a sentence of what you're talking about and maybe I can better answer that question for you.
You're asking me Can we say below or above about the figures that we need to describe.
I think you can.
I don't think it's a problem but if you gave me something specific I could be able to tell you yet at
some point that's OK.
All right so I've written my general overview of so if anybody doesn't have any when we look at this
you know if anybody does have questions about my general overview I'm going to move on to my first specific
paragraph and when I do my first specific paragraph I like to look at some differences that I'm going
to point out.
So for example I can see
yeah there should be a comma after General
we can we can see that the gym size is different.
So I would definitely write about the gym size.
We can see that the outdoor courts are being removed and on the eastern side some are replaced by sports
hall and dance studios and a change room at a cafe on the left side.
There's going to be replaced by a leisure pool change room Sport show so we can see we can see these
these differences.
And I have to be able to take these differences or take these changes and what they're trying to see
is does this person have the ability to formulate sentences to describe this information.
Can the person formulate sentences to describe this information.
All right.
So Lara layer.
Lara sure.
LAURA.
So basically restate the similarity and say that there will be changes in the future.
Yeah that's what I did here Lara.
I'm not sure it was Lara layer but I'm going to call you Lara Yeah that's what I did here.
I stated the obvious similarities that we can see and that I stated that there can be numerous additions
that they're going to have in the future.
Right.
So you know that's that's that's what I did here exactly right.
OK.
So I wrote everybody I'm going to go and write my next paragraph as I did before.
I'm going to move my intro and the whole review down and write my first paragraph next to the graphs
so you can see it better then later on I'll move it OK.
So I'm going to go into right now and and then I'll come back
OK.
Everybody I finish my first paragraph.
No there's no sound.
You keep going in and out of the class room and you're you're missing the directions what I say that
what I just said was I'm turning off my microphone so that I can type the paragraph Okay.
That's why there was no sound.
I turned off my microphone so I'm because I'm typing a paragraph and I don't want you to pick up any
background noise or anything else.
So that's why there's no sound.
All right now everybody this is my first specific paragraph.
You can see what I'm doing here.
Please take a minute and read it and let me know if you have any questions.
And one thing I want you to notice is look at the paragraph and you will see that there are no be verbs
being used.
You hear me saying that a lot today and that's because people don't understand how when you use a lot
of verbs is are was were you know also using the haves and the have and had we use a lot of that stuff.
You're making your writing to be very very simple.
You're making a right to be more and more base.
And you have to learn how to be able to write and not use those.