WEBVTT 00:01.740 --> 00:02.800 OK everybody. 00:03.090 --> 00:08.030 Now we are moving again to Section 3. 00:08.120 --> 00:15.570 I'm sorry we're moving into Section 2 of our lecture series on the general letter and what we're going 00:15.570 --> 00:24.840 to be doing in this section is we're going to look at the application of the theory or application of 00:24.840 --> 00:26.840 the strategy and tactics. 00:27.210 --> 00:36.450 As I mentioned to you in the previous lectures and Section 1 you want to be able to look at the question 00:36.570 --> 00:44.930 do an outline and have your five parts that you want to be able to show. 00:45.560 --> 00:46.080 All right. 00:46.260 --> 00:50.030 So let's take a look at this first letter here. 00:50.310 --> 00:50.580 All right. 00:50.580 --> 00:52.170 Take a look at this first letter here. 00:52.680 --> 01:01.230 And always on the exam is going to be something like this is your local council was considering a sports 01:01.320 --> 01:05.110 and leisure center that it runs in order to save money. 01:05.250 --> 01:06.860 Write a letter to the local council. 01:06.860 --> 01:12.020 In your letter give details of how you and your friends or family use the center. 01:12.300 --> 01:15.600 Explain why the center is important for the local community. 01:15.600 --> 01:20.970 Describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes. 01:20.970 --> 01:29.730 So step number one step number one is to of course make a plan and make a plan. 01:29.730 --> 01:31.870 Make a plan make a plan. 01:32.080 --> 01:39.090 All right and as you can see here I've done it in one minute but we for Part Number one I'm addressing 01:39.810 --> 01:42.420 how it affects my friends and family. 01:42.630 --> 01:43.580 Part Number two. 01:43.620 --> 01:47.790 I put some notes about explaining why it's important to local community. 01:47.790 --> 01:52.080 And part three put about the effects if the center closes. 01:52.080 --> 01:52.470 Right. 01:52.470 --> 01:59.290 So you want to be able to just quickly get down the ideas you're going to talk about. 01:59.730 --> 02:02.080 That way you don't have to think. 02:02.100 --> 02:08.810 And right now you can focus on how you're writing how you want to say it which increases your grade. 02:09.510 --> 02:10.100 All right. 02:10.350 --> 02:16.310 So our first part we go into Dear Sir Madam this is a formal letter. 02:16.480 --> 02:18.810 Dear Sir or Madam. 02:19.110 --> 02:24.350 Some people might think this is informal because it's the local council It really is a formal letter. 02:24.840 --> 02:26.440 OK. 02:26.550 --> 02:32.730 And look at the introduction this well-considered letter is in regards to your erroneously giving serious 02:32.730 --> 02:38.380 thought toward shutting the doors of the beloved local sports and leisure facility. 02:38.670 --> 02:40.390 Right you see how is that starting off. 02:40.410 --> 02:43.410 I am writing the I am writing this letter. 02:44.130 --> 02:49.140 A lot of people will start off I am writing this letter I think is better with a formal letter to be 02:49.170 --> 02:56.430 stronger and stronger in your language and that's something really that I've kind of thought deeply 02:56.430 --> 03:05.390 about in terms of changing their way of writing for your formal letter in the past hour probably hour. 03:05.710 --> 03:12.030 I think I would have suggest that it's OK to say I am writing but really for a formal letter you really 03:12.030 --> 03:20.250 should use this kind of language and that's more of the direction that I think it should go in and especially 03:20.250 --> 03:28.470 after talking to my friends who are have been or graders and have been graders for a long time in terms 03:28.470 --> 03:31.500 of what they like to see and their expectations. 03:31.530 --> 03:37.610 Right but that's an introduction one sentence that's it OK that's all you have to do. 03:37.700 --> 03:43.330 Now when you look at that sentence there because you see some great language erroneously giving for 03:43.400 --> 03:46.200 giving serious thought towards. 03:46.630 --> 03:47.040 Right. 03:47.090 --> 03:53.090 So you see really good use of adverbs and adjectives in the sentence. 03:53.090 --> 03:59.480 Now the next part on the dress part number one to start this gem must remain open for the members of 03:59.480 --> 04:03.500 my family who have been longstanding members of the community. 04:03.710 --> 04:04.250 Right. 04:04.310 --> 04:12.880 So I'll open up with letting them know I'm about to address part number one about my friends and family. 04:13.080 --> 04:13.460 Right. 04:13.460 --> 04:18.200 Topic sentence controlling idea OK. 04:18.850 --> 04:25.240 Both my mother and father suffer from diabetes and I've been utilizing the fitness center to lose weight 04:25.720 --> 04:28.000 and combat this disease. 04:28.000 --> 04:34.510 Not only do my parents benefit from them from the leisure center continued operation but also the city 04:34.510 --> 04:37.740 championship team uses the pool for practice. 04:37.750 --> 04:43.120 The reason why you see that language underlined is that use you're seeing good correlative conjunctions 04:43.760 --> 04:44.310 right. 04:44.320 --> 04:50.140 I'm trying to show you a higher level sentence structures that you can use for writing. 04:50.140 --> 04:53.060 Now notice how many sentences do we have here. 04:53.140 --> 05:03.570 Three sentences three sentences not five sentences six sentences three sentences next paragraph as an 05:03.570 --> 05:06.120 additional point to reject closure. 05:06.210 --> 05:14.460 You should recall how integral the sports facility is to the community due to our geographically horrible 05:14.460 --> 05:15.630 weather. 05:15.840 --> 05:22.770 Snow and ice are present for months a year and the center is the only winter option to have leisure 05:22.770 --> 05:24.060 activities. 05:24.060 --> 05:30.480 Even more to the point the gymnasium is a meeting place for the community that enables us to make connections 05:30.570 --> 05:33.510 and strengthen our neighborhoods. 05:33.570 --> 05:34.500 So again this. 05:34.500 --> 05:39.620 Notice how this this part only focuses on part 2. 05:39.660 --> 05:42.700 Why is it important for the community. 05:42.750 --> 05:46.190 I'm not mixing Part One and Part Two together. 05:46.440 --> 05:49.270 Everything is separate right. 05:49.300 --> 05:52.430 Organized coherent. 05:52.590 --> 05:59.230 Now we go on to part three in terms of the effect on the community I already know before I start writing 05:59.390 --> 06:03.370 I write a sentence about obesity and taking their funds outside. 06:04.020 --> 06:11.300 If you do see sports facility operations we will lose pay if you know that's a conditional sentence. 06:11.300 --> 06:16.620 Right you see compound sentences you see complex sentences you see sentences started with an adjective 06:17.190 --> 06:19.090 mean what with a preposition. 06:19.080 --> 06:22.110 You see all these different types of sentences. 06:22.500 --> 06:26.910 That's what it means in terms of showing a variety or wide range 06:30.240 --> 06:33.990 as you will know we have an obesity epidemic 06:37.180 --> 06:44.360 we have an obesity epidemic in this area and the gym clothes will only increase this problem. 06:44.360 --> 06:51.310 Additionally many citizens may consider relocating to the big city if you begin taking away amenities. 06:51.310 --> 06:56.050 Please take these points in mind when pondering the closing of the sports and leisure facility with 06:56.050 --> 06:58.670 regards john smith. 06:58.930 --> 07:00.630 Right so there you have it. 07:00.730 --> 07:05.080 That's what a good solid letter looks like. 07:05.510 --> 07:06.010 Right. 07:06.190 --> 07:07.720 That's what you want to do. 07:07.900 --> 07:08.770 All right. 07:08.790 --> 07:19.360 That's that's an example of the parts and the process and what it looks like in language and connectors 07:19.500 --> 07:26.620 and coherent and logical structure and progression. 07:26.620 --> 07:32.500 Right that that's what you hear a lot of those words. 07:32.660 --> 07:38.130 But this is these are this is what those words look like in action. 07:38.180 --> 07:46.360 This is how those words look in terms of application language choice word choice tone. 07:47.030 --> 07:48.770 OK. 07:48.920 --> 07:50.280 That's what we're talking about here. 07:50.300 --> 07:54.090 This is a formal letter you should have a formal tone. 07:55.430 --> 07:56.030 All right. 07:56.290 --> 08:02.200 So application in action I really really believe in that. 08:02.260 --> 08:10.930 I really believe in showing you the application of the theory the application of the strategies and 08:10.930 --> 08:15.550 tactics so you can follow the example and do a great job. 08:16.000 --> 08:16.360 All right. 08:16.360 --> 08:18.100 So we're going to stop this one. 08:18.130 --> 08:19.810 This lecture now. 08:20.050 --> 08:22.750 And if you want to read it more of course. 08:22.750 --> 08:24.490 Pause it and read more. 08:24.520 --> 08:26.480 But now we're going to move on to another example. 08:26.500 --> 08:27.540 So I'll talk to you soon.