Hello everybody.
Where are you now going to look at another example of application of strategy.
This is also a semi-formal letter.
This is an example of when you write a letter to your manager.
Right.
Sometimes you see that quite often sometimes on the exam.
And so I just want you to pay attention again to the language of what we're doing here when the semi-formal
it changes a little bit.
Like I said is in between formal and informal but is more way more towards the formal side.
OK so I'm going to go through this when I read it with you.
Strategy is the same tactics are the same for part I'm sorry five parts intro part one part two part
three.
Conclusion.
OK.
Same thing every time.
But you got to get the language right.
You have to write mistake free sentences.
You have to have the proper word choice.
You have to have the proper tone.
You've got to show evidence you can use synonyms right.
You have to do the things that will get you a high score.
That's what you must do.
You have to do that.
So let's get started.
Right.
This is write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you've encountered that
you have encountered in say describe the problem.
How is it affecting your work.
Well needs to be done about it.
Of course we start with a plan for part one describing the problem Moniteur software configuration.
I'm writing down ideas.
It doesn't mean I'm going to use all those ideas.
It doesn't mean I'm going to use all those ideas but these are just ideas I'm writing down that I might
be using.
How is it affecting my work productivity no access deadlines part number for our next part knew what
needs to be done about it.
New PC new software called I-T one week extension does generate your ideas.
If you generate your ideas.
You're not going to have to think about them.
You can focus on your writing focus on what's going to get you a really high score.
All right so let's look at our introduction here.
Maybe I'll make a little bit bigger for you.
You see better maybe there is a little bit better.
I don't know why I'm ask you the question you could answer but there should be a little bit better for
you.
So Dear Mr Williams here I use the name right.
You're writing to your manager so you wouldn't say Dear Sir or Madam.
OK you're working there and you're writing to your manager you should know the person's name but she
wouldn't say Dear Bob right because it's her manager.
So tone.
I know you normally don't hear from me.
However today I must inform you of the serious and debilitating problems I'm having with the PC at my
desk.
Right there's our introduction.
OK we have a good complex sentence there showing my ability.
It's ok that I'm using I is semi formal but you see language there that shows you a semi-formal like
debilitating.
You normally wouldn't use a word like debilitating in a in an informal letter.
Next paragraph is talking about the problem describing the problem as you know the computers assigned
to our department are the 2011 models.
And as a result I'm having several problems.
The system configuration can keep up with the latest software which is used on a day to day basis such
as in MS Word and Excel.
Not only is the software an issue but also the monitors flicker all the time which may or may not result
from very outdated configuration.
OK so I have my problems there.
I have great sentence structures.
You see complex sentences you see compound sentences you see actually the clause so you see variety
you see high level writing.
Next we have to talk about the next part.
You see you see everything's divided into its parts.
Our next part is.
How is it affecting your work.
I'm wondering how is it affecting your work.
I'm going to be talking about productivity no access and deadlines
right.
Undeniably right.
Good way to start a sentence.
Good way to start.
Undeniably the aforementioned problems are seriously affecting my work performance which is something
I know you greatly worry about to start.
My productivity has dropped by 25 percent since these problems appeared and it is not because I'm lazy
or incompetent.
Good language good words and competent productivity right after mentioned.
Undeniably this is showing higher level stuff too.
The drop in productivity directly correlates.
Another good word to my not having access to the same programs as my colleagues.
They are meeting pro now they are meeting every deadline where as complex sentence I am falling short
of the mark.
Due to the computer problems next solutions I am admittedly not a good sentence starting word.
I am no computer expert but I do have a few ideas of what should be done to alleviate.
Good word.
My troubles with the computer of course the easiest course of action would be to purchase a new PC some
secondary solutions include calling.
I need to try to restore my computer to factory specifications or permitting me to have a one week extension
on my deadline.
To sum up.
Having a computer is essential to my work and I hope you respond to my letter quickly.
You see the strategy here is introduction one sentence part 1 3 part 2 3 part 1 part 2 3 part 3 3 sentences
one sentence conclusion.
You might see that work down at the bottom of the same 454.
That's because on the following pages after this there are more letters that are written right.
Well we're not I'm not going to show you that but I'm just want to let you know the work is not 454.
It's because there are other letters.
But you can see the strategy at work around.
You could see the application of this strategy.
It doesn't change.
I hope you're getting a really good understanding of language choice in word choice and what I want
you to do.
What I want you to accomplish.
I hope that's kind of really getting through to you really well.
OK all right so I'm going to do one more example for this second for this second section and then I'm
going to move on and do a live example.
I want to do a live example of a few questions and I'll try to talk to you as I'm going through my live
example to explain things but I want to be able to see what I'm doing in the live example.
I may not be talking as much so you know please don't ask me why aren't you talking more because I'm
writing.
But anyway I'll talk to you soon and I'll see you in the next lecture.
Take care.