OK everybody in this video we're going to take a look at a another general letter by a student and this
is a letter that a student actually did in response to a general letter project.
And just as in the previous video I'm going to show you the original letter.
And then after your seeing the original letter and taking a look at what the student did in the original
letter which is right here.
Then after that we are able to move down because the original letter of the student and you can stop
the tape right here if you need to be able to just read through it at your own liberty.
OK.
And then this is the edited version.
And you can really see how I really went through this through this letter.
They had a lot of mistakes.
They ended up putting the first body paragraph point into their introduction and just had a lot of errors
in this letter that really hold it back from being its best.
And then after you see the edited version right here then you're able to that's another paragraph the
last paragraph of the student is a lot longer of course because I really went through it with just kind
of tearing it up so I can build it into something great.
And then at the end we see the revised version of it.
Right.
So really really when you take a look at this one really really take a look at it and look at the original
one.
Look at all the changes and edits I made.
They look at the revised final version of it so you can really see how you really do something that
gets a great score.
Right.
A saying is about the same quantity of words.
You know mine is a little bit longer the same about the same quantity of words but it's about quality.
Right it's about the quality of your writing.
That's that's what we're really looking at.
So I hope this really helps you guys in terms of being able to see what the requirements are to be able
to perform really well and what how actually the graders might be looking at your letters when you're
writing them.
So it's all about the quality of your writing everybody all about the quality of your writing.
OK.
Talk to you soon.