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OK everybody in this video we're going to take a look at a another general letter by a student and this

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is a letter that a student actually did in response to a general letter project.

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And just as in the previous video I'm going to show you the original letter.

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And then after your seeing the original letter and taking a look at what the student did in the original

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letter which is right here.

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Then after that we are able to move down because the original letter of the student and you can stop

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the tape right here if you need to be able to just read through it at your own liberty.

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OK.

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And then this is the edited version.

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And you can really see how I really went through this through this letter.

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They had a lot of mistakes.

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They ended up putting the first body paragraph point into their introduction and just had a lot of errors

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in this letter that really hold it back from being its best.

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And then after you see the edited version right here then you're able to that's another paragraph the

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last paragraph of the student is a lot longer of course because I really went through it with just kind

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of tearing it up so I can build it into something great.

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And then at the end we see the revised version of it.

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Right.

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So really really when you take a look at this one really really take a look at it and look at the original

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one.

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Look at all the changes and edits I made.

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They look at the revised final version of it so you can really see how you really do something that

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gets a great score.

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Right.

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A saying is about the same quantity of words.

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You know mine is a little bit longer the same about the same quantity of words but it's about quality.

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Right it's about the quality of your writing.

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That's that's what we're really looking at.

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So I hope this really helps you guys in terms of being able to see what the requirements are to be able

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to perform really well and what how actually the graders might be looking at your letters when you're

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writing them.

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So it's all about the quality of your writing everybody all about the quality of your writing.

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OK.

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Talk to you soon.