WEBVTT 00:01.390 --> 00:01.790 OK. 00:01.820 --> 00:03.010 Hello everybody. 00:03.060 --> 00:10.560 Let's move forward and talk about the body paragraphs the body paragraphs are the hamburger there the 00:10.560 --> 00:17.230 hamburger meat on the sandwich the meat of the essay The big part of the essay. 00:17.700 --> 00:27.710 All right body paragraphs are actually really straightforward to understand with with with essay writing 00:27.710 --> 00:39.120 in general is not complicated however most people have trouble executing the very simple basis of a 00:40.190 --> 00:42.220 of a essay. 00:42.220 --> 00:49.690 Now I do understand and I do acknowledge that in different parts of the world they write essays differently 00:50.660 --> 00:57.650 and I know this because I've lived and been all over the world I've worked all over the world and sometimes 00:57.650 --> 01:04.040 when I see the way people write essays whether it's in the Middle East or whether how they write in 01:04.040 --> 01:08.870 Brazil so sometimes my Brazilian students they just keep throwing commas in there. 01:09.560 --> 01:12.680 I mean it's crazy karma karma karma commerce. 01:12.770 --> 01:19.230 Come on man you got to stop you know or you know sometimes Mom students from the Middle East have these 01:19.230 --> 01:29.320 huge never ending paragraphs and so a lot of that is cultural and within that culture it's OK to write 01:29.320 --> 01:30.040 that way. 01:31.210 --> 01:40.400 But when it comes to writing for these examinations these timed examinations it's all about your ability 01:40.400 --> 01:49.300 to write according to the standard and they're talking about an American standard or a UK standard or 01:49.300 --> 01:56.180 an Australian standard which is I'm not going to insult them but it's the same as the UK standards basically. 01:56.380 --> 01:58.780 But all all of the standards are pretty much similar. 01:58.780 --> 02:04.950 We have small differences between our countries but the main parts are almost all the same. 02:05.410 --> 02:07.210 So let's look at the body paragraphs 02:11.090 --> 02:11.530 All right. 02:11.540 --> 02:15.260 So I've kind of already been talking about this in terms of what is a body paragraph. 02:15.270 --> 02:19.420 It's the middle section of the essay right. 02:19.440 --> 02:27.850 Is the is the the meat of a cheeseburger OK the body paragraph must be unified coherent and well-developed 02:29.310 --> 02:36.240 when you're asking me how do I get a great score in my writing of an essay. 02:36.340 --> 02:39.000 Are your ideas well developed. 02:39.010 --> 02:46.880 Do your ideas answer the question write not answer the question in your own mind but answer the question 02:46.910 --> 02:50.180 on the face of what you've actually written on the page 02:53.670 --> 02:55.630 so question to you. 02:55.680 --> 03:06.160 Short quiz What does a body paragraph start with I look at your choices there A B C or D what does a 03:06.160 --> 03:14.440 body paragraph start with a transition word a topic sentence an example or details or a thesis statement 03:16.160 --> 03:16.760 right. 03:18.410 --> 03:23.360 Topic sentence everybody starts with a topic sentence what goes next. 03:23.360 --> 03:30.680 In a body paragraph after your topic sentence a concluding sentence the examples and reasons that the 03:30.680 --> 03:38.280 paragraph is going to be about a transition word and concluding sentence or a hook statement right. 03:38.290 --> 03:46.720 The answer is the examples and reasons that the paragraph is going to be about this is your support 03:47.350 --> 03:56.710 of your ideas and your explanations about them and finally what ends each body paragraph a topic sentence 03:56.770 --> 04:03.680 a piece of statement a transition word or a concluding sentence a concluding sentence. 04:04.020 --> 04:10.350 Right now you don't have to do a concluding sentence every single time but I think is a really good 04:10.350 --> 04:12.510 idea to show the ability to do it. 04:13.900 --> 04:20.890 Is this like you don't have the right 20 compound sentences but show the ability to do it correctly. 04:20.890 --> 04:23.830 You don't have to write ten complex sentences. 04:23.830 --> 04:25.800 Show the ability to do it correctly. 04:29.250 --> 04:29.500 All right. 04:29.500 --> 04:34.960 This is our essay format we're talking about the body paragraph topic sentence. 04:34.960 --> 04:40.930 Sometimes you have an explanation of the controlling idea on the topic sentence like if you have a like 04:40.930 --> 04:50.440 remember my essay earlier my introduction my question earlier that was about reasons why people work 04:51.580 --> 04:56.740 and I was one to talk specifically about the idea of social reinforcement. 04:57.130 --> 05:04.300 So that's not that's not obviously a that's not obvious terminology that somehow is going to easily 05:04.300 --> 05:06.580 maybe understand. 05:06.610 --> 05:13.780 So in my second sentence I might explain what social reinforcement is then I have my concrete detail 05:13.870 --> 05:15.780 or example right. 05:15.790 --> 05:20.150 It could be a detail or an example OK. 05:20.230 --> 05:23.500 And then you have to analyze that detail for example. 05:23.680 --> 05:25.480 Number four is the most important thing. 05:28.530 --> 05:30.300 Number four is the most important thing. 05:31.440 --> 05:36.780 You have to analyze and explain it and then you repeat that process for a second detail. 05:36.780 --> 05:41.910 You have step three and possibly four as they possibly four because it's possible to mix three and four 05:41.910 --> 05:46.050 together and then you have a concluding or transition sentence 05:50.120 --> 05:50.500 right. 05:50.560 --> 05:55.950 So we have those parts. 05:56.040 --> 06:02.720 Now here's our body paragraph format again. 06:02.810 --> 06:10.550 Now one of the most important parts of doing great doing a great body paragraph is explaining details 06:11.480 --> 06:12.920 in these next paragraphs. 06:12.920 --> 06:20.150 I'm not going to read them line by line but I want you to look at the the highlighted lines or the sentences 06:20.240 --> 06:29.230 that are in orange because these paragraphs really explain to you what explanation means right. 06:29.250 --> 06:33.120 You have to really explain your your ideas. 06:33.330 --> 06:37.830 A lot of students mess up and don't understand why they're getting a low score because they just give 06:37.830 --> 06:45.350 a list of details without any explanation without any connection to answering the question and that's 06:45.350 --> 06:46.760 why you're not scoring very well 06:49.660 --> 06:50.080 right. 06:51.420 --> 06:56.550 Look at this example here first uniforms are ugly. 06:56.580 --> 07:06.480 Again this is a simplified version of a paragraph I'm showing you a simple paragraph. 07:06.550 --> 07:09.880 This is not what you are right on your timed exam. 07:09.880 --> 07:11.880 This is just something simple. 07:12.130 --> 07:18.040 So I can explain to you the concept of explanation of a detail. 07:18.190 --> 07:25.590 All right so please don't send me a message and say they don't write paragraphs like I know they don't 07:25.590 --> 07:29.330 write paragraphs like this I'm trying to teach you something. 07:29.670 --> 07:35.440 I'm trying to teach you how to explain yourself first uniforms are ugly and boring. 07:35.440 --> 07:38.320 I don't like the colors they make them look boring. 07:38.360 --> 07:43.370 They have to wear red collared shirts and khaki and khaki pants. 07:43.370 --> 07:46.120 You also have to tuck your shirt into your pants. 07:46.130 --> 07:50.580 Also you have to wear the same thing every day so look at this. 07:50.710 --> 08:01.890 This is just a list of details no explanation now stopped the tape and take a look at this one here. 08:01.900 --> 08:05.870 This is that same information from the previous paragraph. 08:06.250 --> 08:08.620 But we have added explanation 08:11.190 --> 08:11.670 right. 08:12.390 --> 08:16.350 Also students have to tuck in their shirts and pants explanation. 08:16.470 --> 08:23.760 This makes people look ugly since today's style is to wear your shirt on undocked last year we have 08:23.920 --> 08:30.760 lastly we have to wear the same thing everyday so we don't get to show off our regular clothes explanation. 08:30.760 --> 08:34.660 This is a problem because it gets boring to wear the same clothes every day. 08:34.660 --> 08:39.520 It is nice to be able to wear something different each day or to wear something that we want to wear 08:41.430 --> 08:43.160 right explanation. 08:43.310 --> 08:46.640 Everybody this is a simple way. 08:46.770 --> 08:52.950 This is a simple way because sometimes when we tell you you're not explaining you don't get it right. 08:52.950 --> 09:00.000 This is a this this paragraph is a simplified way for you to understand what you need to do you need 09:00.000 --> 09:04.280 to explain yourself. 09:04.360 --> 09:04.770 All right. 09:04.780 --> 09:07.110 This is another example. 09:07.190 --> 09:09.210 This is another non example. 09:09.500 --> 09:10.300 Stop the tape. 09:10.310 --> 09:12.410 Look at it a list of details. 09:12.410 --> 09:14.990 Stop the tape if you need to read. 09:15.080 --> 09:21.690 OK and then we have with explanation. 09:21.770 --> 09:24.280 Look at the difference. 09:24.340 --> 09:25.440 Look at the difference. 09:25.450 --> 09:28.100 Look at how it looks differently with explanation. 09:29.050 --> 09:31.600 Explanation is what gets you a score. 09:31.660 --> 09:38.540 A really really really high score on the rubric explanation. 09:38.740 --> 09:39.050 Right.