OK so I'm going to go and write my introduction and you can try to write the introduction also.
OK.
There is my introduction.
All right.
Now you can take a minute and read my introduction and let me know if you have any questions about what
I did.
I'm looking at some of your introductions.
My two students are selecting higher studies at colleges universities in developed countries which are
far away from their own country in my opinion.
The benefits are more compair are more compare.
I wouldn't say the benefits are more compair I would say the benefits are greater than the drawbacks.
But you want to make sure that you try your best to use them set in them language.
OK.
When I'm trying to address the case of students who try to study in college in their home country I
commonly find the disadvantages of decision not with advantages.
I fell.
Mohamed that's very good.
But you know that's just one sentence with the dawn of the 21st century.
Most students prefer to study abroad in a foreign country.
Well while it all looks good and rosy the advantages disadvantages can be cannot be overlooked.
That's pretty good by Eddie.
All right.
A lot of you guys have two sentences more have three sentences.
Studying abroad is the hope of many students all over the world because it opens a should be opened
to a plethora of opportunities in front of them.
There must be somebody where you guys have learned the word plethora.
I don't know what's going on.
You guys need to come up with a different word Abana some some and some people.
Somebody read somewhere about the word plethora.
Because I've been seeing a rash of students using the word plethora.
However it has some advantages which cannot be rejected.
Yes you guys are doing a pretty good job.
I would just say you got to make sure you have more than one sentence.
Can you please increase the font size.
OK.
I will do that.
I can I can do that.
All right I'll put it to 14.
Is that a little bit better.
Right.
So when you look at my introduction we look at my introduction.
I start off with.
Of course when I do an introduction I believe you start off you know in general that you address the
heart of the question and then you go on to your thesis statement.
So when a student finishes high school there is a feeling of exhilaration.
However their natural highest jeopard as they face the daunting task of deciding to attend university
locally or abroad.
Right.
That's that's what the question is dealing with.
Often there are several parties involved in this decision including parents advisors teachers and friends
all of all of it should be all of whom
seek to determine if the advantages of studying in the country outweigh the negatives associated with
that decision.
Although there may be some points to support the benefits.
There are actually more negative consequences related to psychology culture language and paperwork needed.
Right now again you want to look at when you're talking about a question you want to be able to look
at.
Again it's not just what you're saying is how you're saying it.
So one thing we have to look at is the quality of the sentences right in that in their first sentence.
I'm demonstrating that you can do a complex sentence correctly.
Be able to use however correctly my last sentence is a complex sentence and that being is used correctly
in my second sentence I'm correctly using a semi-colon.
So when a when a greater a greater.
And that's what I talk about is about the quality of what you do not about just doing a simple introduction
when a greater look at just this introduction.
Right.
What they're going to see is well this person's from a grammar standpoint this person's grammar is eight
or nine because of the skills that are being shown with within that.
So a lot of people they say well I'm only getting a six in my arm and my my my my all my grammar part
or five of my grammar.
You have to move your score scale.
Right.
You have to move it up the scale.
So if you want a seven or eight or nine in your writing you've got to do seven eight or nine stuff.
OK.
So we've got to make sure we increase the quality of what we're doing.
Yes you have to do on the answer sheet.
Son I'm reading your question now sign side is asking me Do I have the indent on the answer sheet of
course you do.
Indenting a paragraph in an essay is a fundamental part of doing an essay.
If you don't if you don't indenture paragraph then you're not following the rules or writing for an
essay.
OK so you have to do that.
In all the paragraphs on yes you have to do it in all the paragraphs.
OK introduction all the paragraphs.
That's a fundamental part of writing.
And you guys don't you know you guys get to remember you're being graded by people who care about writing.
So when they see that you're not inventing paragraphs to somebody like me that jumps out right away.
Right I mean I know I noticed that immediately and then when that person is not indenting the first
thing I think is OK this person doesn't understand the basics All right.
So you have to make sure you do that right.
Well is the question is before I go to the next paragraph.
Is is is it necessary to present your opinion in the introduction.
Yeah if the question asked for right.
This question is asking for my opinion if it's a cause or solution question that's not asking for my
opinion.
If this is discussed if it says to discuss the advantages or disadvantages.
That's not asking for my opinion right.
So if the question ask you for your opinion if it's that type of question then yes you have to do that.
You have to make clear your position.
All right.
So I am going to move onto my next paragraph.
Yeah you have to make clear your perspective on what you're doing.
OK everybody.
I'm going to move on to the next the next paragraph I'm going to write a paragraph for the side that
I don't agree with.
All right so you start with the we you start with the opposition first and then you go into the side
that you support OK.
That's how you do the do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
All right.
So I am going to probably go quiet for about five minutes while I'm writing this paragraph and then
I'll take any questions that you have.
If you if you have a if you want to write your own paragraph you're more than welcome to take a look
at it.
But I'm going to go ahead and be silent for a minute while I write this.