WEBVTT 00:02.930 --> 00:09.440 OK so I'm going to go and write my introduction and you can try to write the introduction also. 04:19.720 --> 04:20.590 OK. 04:23.250 --> 04:29.310 There is my introduction. 04:29.340 --> 04:29.750 All right. 04:29.770 --> 04:36.640 Now you can take a minute and read my introduction and let me know if you have any questions about what 04:36.640 --> 04:37.360 I did. 05:21.850 --> 05:25.420 I'm looking at some of your introductions. 05:25.480 --> 05:32.020 My two students are selecting higher studies at colleges universities in developed countries which are 05:32.020 --> 05:34.240 far away from their own country in my opinion. 05:34.240 --> 05:40.200 The benefits are more compair are more compare. 05:41.530 --> 05:47.810 I wouldn't say the benefits are more compair I would say the benefits are greater than the drawbacks. 05:48.190 --> 05:52.350 But you want to make sure that you try your best to use them set in them language. 05:52.430 --> 05:53.260 OK. 05:53.560 --> 05:59.740 When I'm trying to address the case of students who try to study in college in their home country I 05:59.740 --> 06:03.040 commonly find the disadvantages of decision not with advantages. 06:03.040 --> 06:04.950 I fell. 06:05.960 --> 06:07.590 Mohamed that's very good. 06:07.650 --> 06:12.760 But you know that's just one sentence with the dawn of the 21st century. 06:12.760 --> 06:15.840 Most students prefer to study abroad in a foreign country. 06:17.160 --> 06:23.720 Well while it all looks good and rosy the advantages disadvantages can be cannot be overlooked. 06:23.780 --> 06:28.250 That's pretty good by Eddie. 06:28.320 --> 06:28.780 All right. 06:28.800 --> 06:33.620 A lot of you guys have two sentences more have three sentences. 06:35.350 --> 06:42.620 Studying abroad is the hope of many students all over the world because it opens a should be opened 06:42.620 --> 06:47.350 to a plethora of opportunities in front of them. 06:47.770 --> 06:52.500 There must be somebody where you guys have learned the word plethora. 06:53.520 --> 06:54.640 I don't know what's going on. 06:54.640 --> 06:58.550 You guys need to come up with a different word Abana some some and some people. 06:58.610 --> 07:00.770 Somebody read somewhere about the word plethora. 07:00.770 --> 07:05.610 Because I've been seeing a rash of students using the word plethora. 07:06.220 --> 07:09.600 However it has some advantages which cannot be rejected. 07:10.330 --> 07:13.790 Yes you guys are doing a pretty good job. 07:13.990 --> 07:19.270 I would just say you got to make sure you have more than one sentence. 07:19.380 --> 07:21.890 Can you please increase the font size. 07:21.960 --> 07:22.710 OK. 07:23.520 --> 07:24.690 I will do that. 07:24.690 --> 07:27.650 I can I can do that. 07:29.740 --> 07:31.720 All right I'll put it to 14. 07:31.730 --> 07:35.150 Is that a little bit better. 07:35.240 --> 07:35.900 Right. 07:36.200 --> 07:40.380 So when you look at my introduction we look at my introduction. 07:40.490 --> 07:41.990 I start off with. 07:42.020 --> 07:46.760 Of course when I do an introduction I believe you start off you know in general that you address the 07:46.760 --> 07:50.590 heart of the question and then you go on to your thesis statement. 07:50.930 --> 07:54.260 So when a student finishes high school there is a feeling of exhilaration. 07:54.260 --> 07:59.150 However their natural highest jeopard as they face the daunting task of deciding to attend university 07:59.150 --> 08:00.710 locally or abroad. 08:01.180 --> 08:01.570 Right. 08:01.580 --> 08:03.950 That's that's what the question is dealing with. 08:03.950 --> 08:08.960 Often there are several parties involved in this decision including parents advisors teachers and friends 08:09.380 --> 08:12.410 all of all of it should be all of whom 08:15.270 --> 08:19.860 seek to determine if the advantages of studying in the country outweigh the negatives associated with 08:19.860 --> 08:20.790 that decision. 08:21.180 --> 08:24.630 Although there may be some points to support the benefits. 08:24.630 --> 08:31.290 There are actually more negative consequences related to psychology culture language and paperwork needed. 08:31.290 --> 08:38.700 Right now again you want to look at when you're talking about a question you want to be able to look 08:38.700 --> 08:39.910 at. 08:40.140 --> 08:43.560 Again it's not just what you're saying is how you're saying it. 08:43.560 --> 08:49.580 So one thing we have to look at is the quality of the sentences right in that in their first sentence. 08:49.590 --> 08:54.900 I'm demonstrating that you can do a complex sentence correctly. 08:55.440 --> 09:03.690 Be able to use however correctly my last sentence is a complex sentence and that being is used correctly 09:04.360 --> 09:08.000 in my second sentence I'm correctly using a semi-colon. 09:08.040 --> 09:10.700 So when a when a greater a greater. 09:10.770 --> 09:17.340 And that's what I talk about is about the quality of what you do not about just doing a simple introduction 09:18.130 --> 09:21.720 when a greater look at just this introduction. 09:21.840 --> 09:22.340 Right. 09:22.360 --> 09:29.260 What they're going to see is well this person's from a grammar standpoint this person's grammar is eight 09:29.260 --> 09:34.220 or nine because of the skills that are being shown with within that. 09:34.240 --> 09:41.630 So a lot of people they say well I'm only getting a six in my arm and my my my my all my grammar part 09:42.310 --> 09:43.610 or five of my grammar. 09:43.690 --> 09:47.410 You have to move your score scale. 09:47.860 --> 09:48.750 Right. 09:48.760 --> 09:50.200 You have to move it up the scale. 09:50.200 --> 09:57.440 So if you want a seven or eight or nine in your writing you've got to do seven eight or nine stuff. 09:57.580 --> 09:58.490 OK. 09:59.440 --> 10:02.610 So we've got to make sure we increase the quality of what we're doing. 10:06.810 --> 10:09.710 Yes you have to do on the answer sheet. 10:09.930 --> 10:15.690 Son I'm reading your question now sign side is asking me Do I have the indent on the answer sheet of 10:15.690 --> 10:16.530 course you do. 10:17.980 --> 10:24.540 Indenting a paragraph in an essay is a fundamental part of doing an essay. 10:24.970 --> 10:32.710 If you don't if you don't indenture paragraph then you're not following the rules or writing for an 10:32.710 --> 10:33.350 essay. 10:34.360 --> 10:36.670 OK so you have to do that. 10:39.890 --> 10:44.910 In all the paragraphs on yes you have to do it in all the paragraphs. 10:44.990 --> 10:47.870 OK introduction all the paragraphs. 10:47.870 --> 10:49.880 That's a fundamental part of writing. 10:50.150 --> 10:57.100 And you guys don't you know you guys get to remember you're being graded by people who care about writing. 10:57.220 --> 11:03.990 So when they see that you're not inventing paragraphs to somebody like me that jumps out right away. 11:05.020 --> 11:12.570 Right I mean I know I noticed that immediately and then when that person is not indenting the first 11:12.570 --> 11:18.300 thing I think is OK this person doesn't understand the basics All right. 11:18.300 --> 11:20.920 So you have to make sure you do that right. 11:29.590 --> 11:34.190 Well is the question is before I go to the next paragraph. 11:34.270 --> 11:39.660 Is is is it necessary to present your opinion in the introduction. 11:39.700 --> 11:42.760 Yeah if the question asked for right. 11:42.880 --> 11:49.290 This question is asking for my opinion if it's a cause or solution question that's not asking for my 11:49.290 --> 11:50.100 opinion. 11:50.420 --> 11:55.890 If this is discussed if it says to discuss the advantages or disadvantages. 11:55.890 --> 11:59.460 That's not asking for my opinion right. 11:59.490 --> 12:04.700 So if the question ask you for your opinion if it's that type of question then yes you have to do that. 12:10.520 --> 12:13.340 You have to make clear your position. 12:13.340 --> 12:13.700 All right. 12:13.720 --> 12:17.670 So I am going to move onto my next paragraph. 12:20.160 --> 12:22.850 Yeah you have to make clear your perspective on what you're doing. 12:23.160 --> 12:23.960 OK everybody. 12:24.060 --> 12:31.030 I'm going to move on to the next the next paragraph I'm going to write a paragraph for the side that 12:31.030 --> 12:33.650 I don't agree with. 12:33.660 --> 12:41.070 All right so you start with the we you start with the opposition first and then you go into the side 12:41.070 --> 12:43.370 that you support OK. 12:43.380 --> 12:48.360 That's how you do the do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 12:48.360 --> 12:48.680 All right. 12:48.690 --> 12:55.260 So I am going to probably go quiet for about five minutes while I'm writing this paragraph and then 12:55.650 --> 12:58.760 I'll take any questions that you have. 12:59.310 --> 13:03.630 If you if you have a if you want to write your own paragraph you're more than welcome to take a look 13:03.630 --> 13:04.180 at it. 13:04.590 --> 13:07.310 But I'm going to go ahead and be silent for a minute while I write this.