WEBVTT 00:00.090 --> 00:02.520 That's why sometimes people go slow. 00:02.520 --> 00:08.070 People write people go slowly when outlining is because their judging was this a good benefit to talk 00:08.070 --> 00:11.850 about just a bad bit of it to talk about it's a good benefit or a bad benefit. 00:11.850 --> 00:15.330 Just list them right. 00:15.340 --> 00:21.970 Get your get your ideas down on paper and then when I start writing I'll choose the two that I want 00:22.030 --> 00:23.960 or I'll choose the three that I want. 00:24.250 --> 00:25.230 OK. 00:31.330 --> 00:37.110 What if you explain all the benefits rather than just disowning those benefits. 00:40.400 --> 00:49.760 What do you well I mean if you just if you just explain the benefits how do I know whether or not you 00:49.760 --> 00:51.670 support those or not. 00:51.890 --> 00:54.520 How do I know your position on those benefits. 00:55.970 --> 01:03.380 If you just give me a list of them where I make your position known OK. 01:03.610 --> 01:06.840 No no no no no. 01:06.880 --> 01:10.840 When you're writing when you're writing this kind of question is not a discussed the advantages and 01:10.840 --> 01:13.800 disadvantages question is not that kind of question. 01:14.200 --> 01:16.620 It's a different position that you should be taking. 01:17.770 --> 01:22.570 OK it's not a discussed the advantages discussed the disadvantages and give your opinion. 01:22.570 --> 01:24.490 That's not this type of question. 01:26.580 --> 01:31.950 All right you have to you're taking is asking you to take a position and defend your position. 01:36.990 --> 01:43.990 No son I don't have a template to start a body paragraph they are. 01:44.220 --> 01:46.400 If you look online you'll see a lot of templates. 01:46.410 --> 01:53.370 But I'll be honest with you sign graters know when you use that template right. 01:53.540 --> 02:02.930 Well you know I always know when somebody is using a template because we've seen them before right we 02:02.930 --> 02:03.320 see them. 02:03.320 --> 02:04.600 We've seen them before. 02:05.090 --> 02:08.080 And so there's no one. 02:08.480 --> 02:13.910 I mean there are there are some basic things for example you might if you if you're going to if you 02:13.910 --> 02:15.920 decide now I will say this. 02:16.270 --> 02:22.550 You can you can make a decision in advance for example that when I start my first body paragraph I'm 02:22.550 --> 02:27.220 going to use a complex sentence. 02:27.330 --> 02:28.030 Right. 02:28.110 --> 02:33.760 I use a complex sentence so you could have an idea of this of the sentence structure format you're going 02:33.760 --> 02:37.220 to use and then put things into that structure format. 02:37.230 --> 02:45.210 Yes but be very careful taking templates from somewhere somebody because those templates are probably 02:45.210 --> 02:47.060 been used a thousand times. 02:51.190 --> 06:07.940 All right I'm moving on to my last paragraph my last paragraph in my next paragraph everybody. 06:32.220 --> 06:38.940 The city really wanted to study on and you get more than that. 06:39.910 --> 06:46.270 It's almost like psychology has been beating all of the 06:49.210 --> 06:54.220 engineers to the column and each minister as 07:12.950 --> 07:17.690 for some of you guys if we have your microphone please turn it off please. 12:14.870 --> 12:15.540 OK. 12:15.760 --> 12:17.390 All right so sorry for the pause. 12:17.420 --> 12:21.550 This is my paragraph. 12:21.900 --> 12:22.750 Sorry. 12:22.950 --> 12:27.540 This is my paragraph on the side that I support. 12:30.830 --> 12:35.850 The negatives associated with leaving home to study on a new continent carry more weight than any seemingly 12:35.850 --> 12:38.040 positive attributes. 12:38.100 --> 12:43.370 We cannot discount the enormous psychological strain that takes place when we leave. 12:43.380 --> 12:53.200 Excuse me when we leave our home and all that we know this detriment to student psychology often lead 12:53.200 --> 12:59.050 to depression and the venting of depression outweighs the benefits of independence and perspective. 12:59.320 --> 13:01.510 In addition to this like psychological damage 13:05.550 --> 13:10.500 should be a a student learning in the USA will face a culture shock that includes racism and ethnic 13:10.500 --> 13:16.660 bias which makes it not worth it to go and possibly gain the advantage of better courses in foreign 13:16.680 --> 13:18.050 universities. 13:18.120 --> 13:23.190 As a final point of persuasion to not favoring going abroad to study the language barriers associated 13:23.340 --> 13:30.990 with English can truly hinder the intellectual grasp of the subjects studied in university in a university 13:32.420 --> 13:38.750 in the was in this room. 13:41.420 --> 13:42.590 There we go. 13:43.140 --> 13:43.440 All right. 13:43.440 --> 13:51.630 So as you can see in the way that I wrote the question I wrote it as an advantage disadvantage question 13:52.290 --> 13:59.290 but be clear that I'm taking a position that you're clear about the side that I support. 13:59.750 --> 14:08.690 OK now after reading my paragraph here. 14:08.890 --> 14:15.910 Does anybody have know somebody asked when they may have any question they have any questions about 14:15.920 --> 14:19.030 my paragraph that I've written. 14:19.850 --> 14:25.520 Let me know share your opinion on it or let me know if there's anything that you don't understand about 14:25.520 --> 14:26.750 what I wrote. 14:26.780 --> 14:34.000 I'm going to as you're reading the paragraph I'm going to answer a couple of questions. 14:34.470 --> 14:41.930 I'm going to answer a couple of questions from people and say can we use said this is like the grass 14:41.930 --> 14:44.950 is always greener on the other side while expressing our opinion. 14:44.960 --> 14:51.580 No I wouldn't use the grass is greener on the other side that does more use for speaking that's not 14:51.580 --> 14:56.560 really something you really use in a formal formal or semi-formal essay. 14:56.560 --> 14:58.990 So no no grass is greener on the other side. 15:06.190 --> 15:08.690 All right I think right. 15:08.770 --> 15:10.090 I answered your question 15:18.820 --> 15:20.170 see. 15:21.650 --> 15:28.570 Dr. Sheheen is clear the downsides of leaving home country carries more weight as compared to other 15:28.570 --> 15:35.780 aspects good while coping through cultural shock and psychological pressure exposure to many new Such 15:35.790 --> 15:41.810 of dealing with financial matters not in the way of social friable one cannot focus more on studies 15:41.810 --> 15:48.690 which is the major subject of I'm leaving the country as one might end up with compromising education. 15:48.710 --> 15:51.140 Not saying you're on a very good paragraph. 15:51.640 --> 15:54.310 You were a very good paragraph. 15:54.390 --> 15:58.260 You mean there are some grammar mistakes but I mean this is a very very good paragraph's 16:07.230 --> 16:13.370 right very very good and much shit. 16:13.690 --> 16:15.930 Yep I like yours also. 16:20.010 --> 16:24.670 And all that we know all that we know means basically 16:27.560 --> 16:35.570 your home environment right your culture your food your language your family your family everything 16:35.570 --> 16:36.450 that you know. 16:36.800 --> 16:38.870 That's what all that we know means. 16:38.930 --> 16:52.380 OK right now of course the last thing that we would end up that we we end up doing is writing a conclusion. 16:53.750 --> 17:03.470 The conclusion a conclusion is just basically like any conclusion a NTSA is just a summary of what you 17:03.470 --> 17:05.440 wrote about. 17:05.480 --> 17:08.260 That's really what a conclusion involves. 17:08.330 --> 17:18.140 The main point that I wanted to make today was really trying to show you in terms of the position that 17:18.140 --> 17:23.720 you want to take with a question that says Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. 17:25.310 --> 17:25.620 Right. 17:25.630 --> 17:32.480 There's a certain position that you should take when when the question says that and a lot of students 17:32.480 --> 17:42.170 were just writing the advantages or disadvantages and then giving their opinion and I think that the 17:42.170 --> 17:48.170 way that I showed you to write it today is another way of thinking about writing that question and is 17:48.170 --> 17:53.040 actually a stronger way of stronger way of writing that question. 17:53.300 --> 18:02.200 So before I wrap up Does anybody have any questions about what I've done today. 18:14.030 --> 18:17.990 While you guys are think of any questions that you might have I'm going to go ahead and write a.