WEBVTT 00:01.020 --> 00:02.710 I'm going to go ahead to write a conclusion. 01:22.050 --> 01:23.160 OK. 01:23.220 --> 01:23.390 And 01:27.560 --> 01:30.110 some of you have to go with just fine understand is Friday. 01:30.110 --> 01:35.750 Some people have to work so we let families and people or people are all over the world. 01:35.750 --> 01:40.490 I mean some of you guys are all over the world so I know we're all in different time zones so if you 01:40.490 --> 01:42.240 have to go is fine. 01:42.950 --> 01:44.780 If there's anything that you. 01:45.120 --> 01:46.620 I am what I am recording it. 01:46.620 --> 01:49.660 So if you want to watch it later on that's fine. 01:49.660 --> 01:51.020 Or listen later on ossify 02:05.240 --> 02:07.200 I think somebody said something horrible second 02:43.520 --> 04:29.040 in Rock On You can see that. 04:29.380 --> 04:40.380 And there is my conclusion right now I've only done four paragraphs right. 04:40.390 --> 04:51.840 I've only done four paragraphs and my word count how the work I read somewhere that I have to cut out. 04:51.850 --> 04:57.260 But because it was the outline was included but I ended up really with a lot of words. 04:57.310 --> 04:58.440 OK. 04:58.910 --> 05:01.890 I it was a big high workout. 05:03.320 --> 05:13.100 But like I say it I I wrote I have a lot of really compound and complex and correlative sentences. 05:13.280 --> 05:19.800 So remember it's about the quality of the writing it's the quality of the writing which is what really 05:19.800 --> 05:21.260 matters. 05:21.270 --> 05:27.930 So if somebody were to look at the essay that I did and they were to count the actual sentences that 05:27.930 --> 05:39.130 I have that I wrote you would probably see that I wrote probably three or seven 05:43.700 --> 05:50.470 12 I wrote roughly 15 to 16 sentences that's all. 05:50.820 --> 05:57.240 But again you have to look at the kind of sentences that I'm writing right at the kind of sentences 05:57.240 --> 06:03.570 that I'm writing that gives you a good idea about the quality of writing in terms of being able to really 06:04.500 --> 06:11.210 raise your level of writing because somebody can write a perfect essay. 06:11.670 --> 06:23.010 But if you're writing all if you're writing all simple sentences and only compound sentences then you're 06:23.010 --> 06:27.560 not going to great you're not going to be scored at the highest that was in terms of grammar. 06:30.410 --> 06:34.040 I think it's I think it's better to use. 06:34.190 --> 06:36.860 You can use don't like here. 06:37.500 --> 06:37.740 Right. 06:37.770 --> 06:39.000 I say don't. 06:39.210 --> 06:49.140 But technically I mean you could try to be conscious of that in terms of don't and do not. 06:49.140 --> 06:52.560 Some people like to think of these essays as being formal. 06:52.680 --> 06:59.380 I think of them more as being semi formal then really formal. 06:59.540 --> 07:05.780 But yeah I mean I think if you're conscious of it try your best to just use do not instead of don't 07:05.780 --> 07:11.020 try to avoid your contractions as much as possible but it's not really that big of a deal. 07:25.320 --> 07:26.560 Yeah. 07:26.850 --> 07:30.440 A good question is by wretched wretched said. 07:30.820 --> 07:37.200 I mention the benefits in my paragraph when I was talking about the negatives. 07:37.290 --> 07:42.690 Just think about it when I do that what does that build that makes the pair that makes the essay very 07:42.690 --> 07:43.720 coherent. 07:46.520 --> 07:46.980 Right. 07:47.000 --> 07:53.460 When you talk about coherence that's what coherency is all the points connected together. 07:54.680 --> 08:02.660 Right that's that's why that's why you saw me reference the benefits that I've talked about previously 08:02.660 --> 08:08.690 that's why you saw me reference those benefits in the next paragraph right there that that's how you 08:08.690 --> 08:15.560 really build coherence. 08:15.730 --> 08:16.290 Yes. 08:16.300 --> 08:22.430 And the conclusion again we're making my final point of view right where you were you that when you 08:22.430 --> 08:28.160 look at when you look at my essay so I'm answering your questions. 08:28.400 --> 08:34.520 When you look at my essay from beginning to end from the thesis statement on Dale you're extremely clear 08:34.520 --> 08:36.270 about what my position is. 08:37.530 --> 08:38.040 Right. 08:38.130 --> 08:40.730 And I've strongly supported my position. 08:42.930 --> 08:43.430 OK. 08:43.480 --> 08:44.240 So. 08:44.440 --> 08:46.990 So yeah that's that's why you that's why you see that 08:57.710 --> 08:59.340 so I'll say 09:09.390 --> 09:10.980 reading Dr Haines 09:13.730 --> 09:16.710 you're not saying your conclusion is pretty good also. 09:23.350 --> 09:30.230 Dr. Shaheen you write really well I hope you can do this in the time frame are you able to write this 09:30.230 --> 09:32.550 well and the time frame as good. 09:37.240 --> 09:39.490 No all of the session is not. 09:43.700 --> 09:44.500 No. 09:44.520 --> 09:48.250 MS. Gupta I cannot do this. 09:48.440 --> 09:56.270 I can't I can't do a review the I I just wrote a whole essay but Ms. 09:56.270 --> 09:59.590 Gupta The These. 09:59.770 --> 10:02.020 The session is recorded right. 10:02.020 --> 10:04.460 So you hope you'll be able to watch later on. 10:04.460 --> 10:05.020 OK. 10:11.930 --> 10:12.600 OK. 10:12.860 --> 10:22.640 So everybody I'm going to stop right here and I hope that you guys have a little bit more perspective 10:23.660 --> 10:31.960 on the outway question and really kind of what you're supposed be doing is really talking about you. 10:32.170 --> 10:38.780 You have to really take a position right because that's what he's asking you why do you believe the 10:38.780 --> 10:41.570 benefits outweigh the drawbacks. 10:41.620 --> 10:45.960 It's not discuss the benefits and discuss the drawbacks. 10:45.980 --> 10:56.400 OK so the way I wrote it is a way that you could write it and strongly you know answer that question. 10:56.400 --> 11:01.370 You know clearly when you look at my essay you can see that I don't believe the benefits outweigh the 11:01.370 --> 11:02.020 drawbacks. 11:02.030 --> 11:05.040 I don't believe that. 11:05.560 --> 11:08.150 I don't believe that so. 11:08.740 --> 11:10.550 But that's what that's for the greater should see. 11:10.570 --> 11:22.180 But also don't don't get so caught don't get don't get stuck on the the task response part right don't 11:22.180 --> 11:24.980 only get stuck on the task for response part. 11:25.240 --> 11:25.700 Right. 11:25.750 --> 11:32.070 I did respond to that task but also look at the vocabulary that I used. 11:32.170 --> 11:34.920 Look at the grammatical structures that are used. 11:35.020 --> 11:42.320 Look at how I made sure that it was coherent because there are four areas integrated in test responses 11:42.340 --> 11:50.260 just one right now mainly mainly what I did talk about today was task response but also I made a point 11:50.260 --> 11:56.320 for you to look at the types of sentences that I'm using the types of words that I'm using. 11:56.440 --> 12:05.950 I try to use it in language when I could I tried to use a variety of vocabulary so you know look that's 12:05.950 --> 12:09.190 what you want to make sure you look at all those parts. 12:09.220 --> 12:09.510 All right. 12:09.520 --> 12:16.600 Not just did he respond to the question. 12:17.750 --> 12:19.680 Good. 12:20.500 --> 12:24.600 I I can't it will be sometime today. 12:24.830 --> 12:29.420 Right I can't give it to you right now at this moment because I have to pry. 12:29.490 --> 12:31.430 I have to process. 12:31.560 --> 12:37.730 I have to process the video and then I have to upload it to a Google Drive and other stuff. 12:37.750 --> 12:40.230 And so that takes a little bit of time. 12:40.230 --> 12:42.070 So that is not instant 12:49.050 --> 12:49.510 OK. 12:49.590 --> 12:54.700 Sun has a question nowadays in some countries the numbers of children ages and you are increasing. 12:54.700 --> 13:03.920 What are the current and future effects of ever increasing population. 13:06.770 --> 13:14.500 All right I have a little bit of time on what I'm going to try to look at son's question very quickly. 13:16.720 --> 13:23.920 Side is asking me a question about us a different essay question about try to do it very quickly. 13:24.300 --> 13:31.090 Besides we have to be quiet because I have another I have another class I have to teach and I have to 13:31.240 --> 13:39.030 get ready for SOS is really as I look at it very very quickly I can't look at it with a lot of depth. 13:48.440 --> 13:54.980 Nowadays everybody what I'm doing right now this has nothing to do with the topic that I talked about 13:54.980 --> 13:55.610 today. 13:56.500 --> 13:59.730 There's nothing there about the topic I talked about today. 13:59.860 --> 14:09.290 This has to deal with a question that that sign sign is somebody in the class just asked me. 14:09.520 --> 14:14.820 Nowadays in some countries the numbers of children aged 15 and younger are increasing. 14:14.980 --> 14:21.190 What are the current and future effects of ever increasing population really really quick side. 14:21.190 --> 14:22.780 This is a very easy question. 14:41.870 --> 14:43.570 That's a good sign. 14:46.080 --> 14:50.540 As body one that's body too. 14:51.530 --> 14:53.650 OK. 14:55.110 --> 14:59.230 A lot of times on the question the question tells you what to do. 14:59.670 --> 15:00.330 Don't. 15:00.660 --> 15:02.270 Don't overcomplicate it. 15:02.280 --> 15:04.810 I have to turn off somebodies microphone. 15:05.010 --> 15:06.850 Don't don't overcomplicate it. 15:06.870 --> 15:07.920 OK. 15:25.920 --> 15:30.600 How about cupping your word document and putting it in this chat box. 15:31.640 --> 15:39.080 Check to putting it in the chat box. 15:39.810 --> 15:43.710 What I will do is I will I will e-mail. 15:43.710 --> 15:45.130 I would just e-mail the essay 15:48.580 --> 15:55.410 where I would just email the essay and I can put it in a chat box because it won't it won't really fit. 15:55.680 --> 16:02.830 But how how do that I'm I'm going to try to process the video as quickly as I can. 16:02.830 --> 16:05.690 I mean it should be processed within an hour. 16:05.740 --> 16:06.350 OK. 16:07.630 --> 16:08.870 All right. 16:09.070 --> 16:11.230 Are there any last questions before I sign off 16:14.250 --> 16:18.510 where so you can understand my worry. 16:18.930 --> 16:21.790 Yes I understand your worry. 16:22.170 --> 16:25.380 Yes I do understand your worry a concern. 16:26.220 --> 16:31.860 Some were saying UPDF my essay side. 16:31.880 --> 16:34.590 OK. 16:35.400 --> 16:42.690 I'm going to put if you want me to take a look at an essay for you. 16:44.820 --> 16:45.820 How about this. 16:45.820 --> 16:46.900 I will put 16:50.500 --> 16:53.260 no but one for the essay everybody. 16:53.550 --> 16:57.830 Sign is just ask as soon as they ask me the question of writing an essay. 16:58.140 --> 17:02.720 If if you want if you want to write an essay right. 17:02.890 --> 17:04.270 I think I will. 17:04.300 --> 17:09.190 I can give you a do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 17:09.190 --> 17:15.160 QUESTION But what I was talking about doing the only reason I would be doing that is if you were going 17:15.160 --> 17:20.170 to try to write the essay right now under tyed conditions right. 17:20.230 --> 17:21.490 That's what I was talking about. 17:21.490 --> 17:31.720 I will give you if you are if you have the time right now I will I will I will put the essay question 17:31.720 --> 17:33.700 in the chat box. 17:33.760 --> 17:40.770 You can have and then you would have 40 minutes to write your essay and then you would have to send 17:40.770 --> 17:41.830 it to me. 17:41.830 --> 17:43.900 But that was that's what I was going to do. 17:44.130 --> 17:52.570 I was going to set up I was going to arrange it so that you have an opportunity to write under real 17:52.570 --> 17:54.200 test conditions. 17:54.510 --> 17:58.260 Ok not take the question then go home and take two hours to write it. 17:58.270 --> 18:04.970 So is there anybody if anybody is interested in doing the question under test conditions. 18:05.230 --> 18:14.860 I'll give you the question and then you would have 40 minutes to well really I just like 40 45 minutes 18:15.340 --> 18:19.360 to write the question and actually e-mail it to me. 18:19.360 --> 18:23.140 And if it's after 45 minutes I'm not going to take it. 18:23.140 --> 18:23.520 All right. 18:23.520 --> 18:31.830 So if you want to write under test conditions right now let me know and I'll send you a question. 18:46.510 --> 18:49.390 So I'm going to pose the question right now. 18:49.390 --> 18:50.440 Hold on one second. 19:05.080 --> 19:11.380 You should make sure you should make sure you have a clock in front of you and your clock is on 40 minutes 19:12.370 --> 19:20.440 because after I give you the question I'm going to put my clock on 45 minutes to put it going to 45 19:20.440 --> 19:28.650 minutes and give you time to write down the question and also time to e-mail it to me. 19:28.690 --> 19:34.090 But after 45 minutes of this is this is the way this works so everybody is clear. 19:34.420 --> 19:41.080 I'm only giving I'm given the question I'm only giving 45 minutes to write. 19:41.410 --> 19:47.740 You can write or type if you if you write it if you write it then if you write it in you're going to 19:47.740 --> 19:54.930 have to take a picture of it and convert it to a PTF and send it to me if you want to you're going to 19:55.000 --> 19:56.670 type it which is just fine. 19:57.090 --> 19:57.390 Right. 19:57.400 --> 19:58.970 You can type it is just fine.