I'm going to go ahead to write a conclusion.
OK.
And
some of you have to go with just fine understand is Friday.
Some people have to work so we let families and people or people are all over the world.
I mean some of you guys are all over the world so I know we're all in different time zones so if you
have to go is fine.
If there's anything that you.
I am what I am recording it.
So if you want to watch it later on that's fine.
Or listen later on ossify
I think somebody said something horrible second
in Rock On You can see that.
And there is my conclusion right now I've only done four paragraphs right.
I've only done four paragraphs and my word count how the work I read somewhere that I have to cut out.
But because it was the outline was included but I ended up really with a lot of words.
OK.
I it was a big high workout.
But like I say it I I wrote I have a lot of really compound and complex and correlative sentences.
So remember it's about the quality of the writing it's the quality of the writing which is what really
matters.
So if somebody were to look at the essay that I did and they were to count the actual sentences that
I have that I wrote you would probably see that I wrote probably three or seven
12 I wrote roughly 15 to 16 sentences that's all.
But again you have to look at the kind of sentences that I'm writing right at the kind of sentences
that I'm writing that gives you a good idea about the quality of writing in terms of being able to really
raise your level of writing because somebody can write a perfect essay.
But if you're writing all if you're writing all simple sentences and only compound sentences then you're
not going to great you're not going to be scored at the highest that was in terms of grammar.
I think it's I think it's better to use.
You can use don't like here.
Right.
I say don't.
But technically I mean you could try to be conscious of that in terms of don't and do not.
Some people like to think of these essays as being formal.
I think of them more as being semi formal then really formal.
But yeah I mean I think if you're conscious of it try your best to just use do not instead of don't
try to avoid your contractions as much as possible but it's not really that big of a deal.
Yeah.
A good question is by wretched wretched said.
I mention the benefits in my paragraph when I was talking about the negatives.
Just think about it when I do that what does that build that makes the pair that makes the essay very
coherent.
Right.
When you talk about coherence that's what coherency is all the points connected together.
Right that's that's why that's why you saw me reference the benefits that I've talked about previously
that's why you saw me reference those benefits in the next paragraph right there that that's how you
really build coherence.
Yes.
And the conclusion again we're making my final point of view right where you were you that when you
look at when you look at my essay so I'm answering your questions.
When you look at my essay from beginning to end from the thesis statement on Dale you're extremely clear
about what my position is.
Right.
And I've strongly supported my position.
OK.
So.
So yeah that's that's why you that's why you see that
so I'll say
reading Dr Haines
you're not saying your conclusion is pretty good also.
Dr. Shaheen you write really well I hope you can do this in the time frame are you able to write this
well and the time frame as good.
No all of the session is not.
No.
MS. Gupta I cannot do this.
I can't I can't do a review the I I just wrote a whole essay but Ms.
Gupta The These.
The session is recorded right.
So you hope you'll be able to watch later on.
OK.
So everybody I'm going to stop right here and I hope that you guys have a little bit more perspective
on the outway question and really kind of what you're supposed be doing is really talking about you.
You have to really take a position right because that's what he's asking you why do you believe the
benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
It's not discuss the benefits and discuss the drawbacks.
OK so the way I wrote it is a way that you could write it and strongly you know answer that question.
You know clearly when you look at my essay you can see that I don't believe the benefits outweigh the
drawbacks.
I don't believe that.
I don't believe that so.
But that's what that's for the greater should see.
But also don't don't get so caught don't get don't get stuck on the the task response part right don't
only get stuck on the task for response part.
Right.
I did respond to that task but also look at the vocabulary that I used.
Look at the grammatical structures that are used.
Look at how I made sure that it was coherent because there are four areas integrated in test responses
just one right now mainly mainly what I did talk about today was task response but also I made a point
for you to look at the types of sentences that I'm using the types of words that I'm using.
I try to use it in language when I could I tried to use a variety of vocabulary so you know look that's
what you want to make sure you look at all those parts.
All right.
Not just did he respond to the question.
Good.
I I can't it will be sometime today.
Right I can't give it to you right now at this moment because I have to pry.
I have to process.
I have to process the video and then I have to upload it to a Google Drive and other stuff.
And so that takes a little bit of time.
So that is not instant
OK.
Sun has a question nowadays in some countries the numbers of children ages and you are increasing.
What are the current and future effects of ever increasing population.
All right I have a little bit of time on what I'm going to try to look at son's question very quickly.
Side is asking me a question about us a different essay question about try to do it very quickly.
Besides we have to be quiet because I have another I have another class I have to teach and I have to
get ready for SOS is really as I look at it very very quickly I can't look at it with a lot of depth.
Nowadays everybody what I'm doing right now this has nothing to do with the topic that I talked about
today.
There's nothing there about the topic I talked about today.
This has to deal with a question that that sign sign is somebody in the class just asked me.
Nowadays in some countries the numbers of children aged 15 and younger are increasing.
What are the current and future effects of ever increasing population really really quick side.
This is a very easy question.
That's a good sign.
As body one that's body too.
OK.
A lot of times on the question the question tells you what to do.
Don't.
Don't overcomplicate it.
I have to turn off somebodies microphone.
Don't don't overcomplicate it.
OK.
How about cupping your word document and putting it in this chat box.
Check to putting it in the chat box.
What I will do is I will I will e-mail.
I would just e-mail the essay
where I would just email the essay and I can put it in a chat box because it won't it won't really fit.
But how how do that I'm I'm going to try to process the video as quickly as I can.
I mean it should be processed within an hour.
OK.
All right.
Are there any last questions before I sign off
where so you can understand my worry.
Yes I understand your worry.
Yes I do understand your worry a concern.
Some were saying UPDF my essay side.
OK.
I'm going to put if you want me to take a look at an essay for you.
How about this.
I will put
no but one for the essay everybody.
Sign is just ask as soon as they ask me the question of writing an essay.
If if you want if you want to write an essay right.
I think I will.
I can give you a do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
QUESTION But what I was talking about doing the only reason I would be doing that is if you were going
to try to write the essay right now under tyed conditions right.
That's what I was talking about.
I will give you if you are if you have the time right now I will I will I will put the essay question
in the chat box.
You can have and then you would have 40 minutes to write your essay and then you would have to send
it to me.
But that was that's what I was going to do.
I was going to set up I was going to arrange it so that you have an opportunity to write under real
test conditions.
Ok not take the question then go home and take two hours to write it.
So is there anybody if anybody is interested in doing the question under test conditions.
I'll give you the question and then you would have 40 minutes to well really I just like 40 45 minutes
to write the question and actually e-mail it to me.
And if it's after 45 minutes I'm not going to take it.
All right.
So if you want to write under test conditions right now let me know and I'll send you a question.
So I'm going to pose the question right now.
Hold on one second.
You should make sure you should make sure you have a clock in front of you and your clock is on 40 minutes
because after I give you the question I'm going to put my clock on 45 minutes to put it going to 45
minutes and give you time to write down the question and also time to e-mail it to me.
But after 45 minutes of this is this is the way this works so everybody is clear.
I'm only giving I'm given the question I'm only giving 45 minutes to write.
You can write or type if you if you write it if you write it then if you write it in you're going to
have to take a picture of it and convert it to a PTF and send it to me if you want to you're going to
type it which is just fine.
Right.
You can type it is just fine.